Hi. This is a paragraph that I wrote about myself. Can anyone give me some advices and correct it?
My full name is Nguyen Quang Tung, and everyone can call me one word “Tung”. My first name “Nguyen” is very common in Viet Nam, about 40% population and the less common is “Tran”, “Le” and “Bui”. This year, I’m 21 years old and living in Ho Chi Minh City to study at a university. My hometown is called Di Linh district and this is the place I was born, and it is a small town located in the geographically center of the Lam Dong province. It can say that my town is agricultural one because the major population works in the coffee and tea industry. As I mentioned, I am living in HCM City, the biggest city in Viet Nam and also known as the financial and economic center of the country. I have lived there for 4 years because I was accepted by a school, Ho Chi Minh University of Law, and I’m a final student and my major is Civil Law. The reason I applied to this university is that I have had a dream of becoming a lawyer since I was a kid and maybe I was inspired by some famous films related to criminals. I think I am a kind of person who has a brave, confident and friendly personality, although I was used to a shy kid. I recognized that I had to change my characteristics when I was older.
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Firstly, you use too much "and", "is", "I" and "the" in your paragraph, many are wrong grammar. For example: We never say "The Lam Dong province". I was used to a shy kid => wrong, "I was a shy kid" or "I used to be a shy kid" I recognized that I had to change my characteristics when I was older: wrong grammar ...
- Firstly, you use too much "and", "is", "I" and "the" in your paragraph, many are wrong grammar.
- For example: We never say "The Lam Dong province".
- I was used to a shy kid => wrong, "I was a shy kid" or "I used to be a shy kid" I recognized that I had to change my characteristics when I was older: wrong grammar ...
- Some unwanted clause: - My hometown is called Di Linh district and this is the place I was born - I have lived there for 4 years because I was accepted by a school, Ho Chi Minh University of Law, and I’m a final student and my major is Civil Law
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Firstly, you use too much "and", "is", "I" and "the" in your paragraph, many are wrong grammar.
For example:
We never say "The Lam Dong province".
I was used to a shy kid => wrong, "I was a shy kid" or "I used to be a shy kid"
I recognized that I had to change my characteristics when I was older: wrong grammar
...
Some unwanted clause:
- My hometow
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