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The topic : It is better for college students to live in schools than live at home with their parents . Do you agree or disagree ?

In the society, some people thinks that college student live in school better than student who live with their family. Personally, I partly agree with this opinion.

On the one hand, students live without parents who have good relationship with their family. Because, people live far away their house, they feel homesickness who have time to remember past, and respect memory staying with their family. For example, my friend studied abroad in Canada, but his comprehension still was directed to his house, he found some pictures about his family in free time. Furthermore, students determine exactly their targets than who live with parents. To illustrates, they ask some quetions from themselves such as 'what kind of good Internet', or 'what do you eat tonight' this some simple questions, but it has people who have strong thinking, and consistent in their plans future.

On the other hand, some individuals thinks that college studying with parents, it has benefits than negatives. Firstly, students can save money for their parents. For instance, people maintains money for Internet, household, food, and transformation. This money who spend for factilities they can buy somethings for themselves. Secondly, student received carefully from parents or neighborhoods. In fact, they are supported too much from family when they feel boring, and defeat in working environments, who always have appeasement about both metal and health from lover.

Indeed, student who live without parents or with parents it also has both advantages and negative, but if student struggle likely with other environments, who will be sucessfully in the society.