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Anonymous Posted 9 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
hi, please help me
Please, to give comments on my translation in terms of the language style, language used, and dictions used. And also to give feedback on the content of the story.
Grabbed Wrong Man
At that time Lady Cempluk and Jon Koplo were shopping at popular mall in Solo city. At the clothing outlet, cempluk chose clothes, that she thought as a best gift. After she found it, they went to cash desk. The queue in the cash desk was long. Cempluk queued first, while Koplo queuing behind her.The queue was very long because the cashier is a new employee seen from her uniform. Cempluk tried to find another cash desk where there was no queue, suddenly she found it.
“There was no queue! Let’s us go there,Plo!” said Cempluk while grabbing Jon Koplo’s hand who stood behind her. But what’s happend? “Eeeh... Where are we going to?” someone’s screamed made Cempluk shocked. She turned and surprised! What! She grabbed somene’s hand which is a fat man! Koplo was not standing right behind Cempluk, but after the fat man.
Sources: m.solopos.com/2014/04/19/jon-koplo-salah-tarik-503368
Grabbed Wrong Man
At that time Lady Cempluk and Jon Koplo were shopping at popular mall in Solo city. At the clothing outlet, cempluk chose clothes, that she thought as a best gift. After she found it, they went to cash desk. The queue in the cash desk was long. Cempluk queued first, while Koplo queuing behind her.The queue was very long because the cashier is a new employee seen from her uniform. Cempluk tried to find another cash desk where there was no queue, suddenly she found it.
“There was no queue! Let’s us go there,Plo!” said Cempluk while grabbing Jon Koplo’s hand who stood behind her. But what’s happend? “Eeeh... Where are we going to?” someone’s screamed made Cempluk shocked. She turned and surprised! What! She grabbed somene’s hand which is a fat man! Koplo was not standing right behind Cempluk, but after the fat man.
Sources: m.solopos.com/2014/04/19/jon-koplo-salah-tarik-503368
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I've edited your translation to make it more idiomatic. I don't speak Indonesian, so I can't promise that my version accurately represents the meaning of the original. As for the comments on language used, I'm guessing that's your homework assignment, right?
- I've edited your translation to make it more idiomatic.
- I don't speak Indonesian, so I can't promise that my version accurately represents the meaning of the original.
- As for the comments on language used, I'm guessing that's your homework assignment, right?
- Grabbed the Wrong Man !
- At the time Lady Cempluk and Jon Koplo were shopping at a popular mall in Solo city.
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I've edited your translation to make it more idiomatic. I don't speak Indonesian, so I can't promise that my version accurately represents the meaning of the original. As for the comments on language used, I'm guessing that's your homework assignment, right?
Grabbed the Wrong Man
Grabbed the Wrong Man
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