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Drug Addiction in UAE

For the past three decades, the UAE has faced rapid changes in economic and social fields which helped spread many problems such as drug addiction. The statistics of Anti-Narcotics Department of the Ministry of Interior, published by Al Amn — the official magazine of Dubai Police, showed that, “More than 113 individuals were charged in 63 drug cases in the UAE in July 2004” (113 charged in 63 drug cases in July,2004). The statistic showed that 33 % of addicted people were UAE nationals and some of them were for drug using and drug spreading. Therefore, this serious problem needs to be solved as soon as possible for the good of the society. As a solution to this problem, I propose that our youth are presented with awareness lectures on how drugs are bad and how they affect people badly.

The causes and effects of this phenomenon are different from person to person. Family problems, pressures, and lack of their involvement can lead some people to become addict to drugs. Drugs lets people feel that they are in different world and they forget what is happening around them. Others might become addict to drugs due to media. Media nowadays is playing a big role in people life. Many movies and programs describe how to take drugs. Also some movies shows that drugs are a good thing and it let people forget what is around them. Which all that are wrong. According to “Proposals to curb drug abuse(2004)”, research done by Aysha Ibrahim Al Buraimi of the Police Research Centre at the General Directorate of Sharjah Police, “ the majority of students answered the questionnaire on how they knew of drugs by saying it was through the media”. Other causes for addicting drugs would be having bad friends. Friends are very important to everybody and they also the easy way to get affect from them. Having bad friends can lead to imitate them even if it was in long term. Some addicted people die because of the drugs. The effects of drugs can cause to have bad disease such as AIDS and Cancer. The disease among addicted people spread due to use of drugs injections several time and in polluted place.

Awareness lectures are best solutions for this problem. Police department of the city should prepare awareness lectures in general places such as theatres and in private places such as schools. These lectures should explain what drugs are, how it affects people, and what laws government put to punish who deal with drug. In my opinion, this solution can benefit people because preventing people from it is better than treating it.

Some might argue that putting strong laws is better than awareness lectures. Laws can prevent people to deal with drugs because they will be afraid if they caught by police people. This suggestion might be true but it's not an ideal solution. That because it might graduate people who will be worse than before. These laws might not suit all kind of people which might let them to do thing worse than addicting drugs when they come out. Therefore, spreading awareness lectures of how bad drugs are can eliminate the number of people who will addict drugs.

Drugs are some of the problems that comes because of the rapid development of the country. It has many causes such as the effect of media and bad friend. Moreover, it causes very bad effects on people such as diseases and dies. Preventing people from it by spreading awareness lectures can solve the problem.
  

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(Congratulations. This is very good writing for a beginner. ) Drug Addiction in UAE For the past three decades, the UAE has faced rapid changes in economic and social fields which helped spread many problems such as drug addiction.

  • (Congratulations.
  • This is very good writing for a beginner.
  • ) Drug Addiction in UAE For the past three decades, the UAE has faced rapid changes in economic and social fields which helped spread many problems such as drug addiction.
  • The statistics of Anti-Narcotics Department of the Ministry of Interior, published by Al Amn — the official magazine of Dubai Police, showed that, “More than 113 individuals were charged in 63 drug cases in the UAE in July 2004” (113 charged in 63 drug cases in July,2004).
  • The statistic s showed that 33 % of addicted people were UAE nationals , some of which were charged with drug use, others with drug peddling .
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Drug Addiction in UAE

For the past three decades, the UAE has faced rapid changes in economic and social fields which helped spread many problems such as drug addiction. The statistics of Anti-Narcotics Department of the Ministry of Interio

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