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Amiramim Posted 14 years ago
Grammar
Hi ,is this understandable ?if not what's wrong with it?
We regret to inform you that the main pipe of dimeter 700mm ,supplying X town with water has undergone a damage characterized by a dislocation of the bend, and this , during the morning of December 4th,2012 caused by X company.
For this purpose ,the main pumping coming from X and Y station has been stopped to allow the necessary executions .This situation is going to generate a total stopping of the distribution to X town during the whole day of actual repair work
THANK YOU
For this purpose ,the main pumping coming from X and Y station has been stopped to allow the necessary executions .This situation is going to generate a total stopping of the distribution to X town during the whole day of actual repair work
THANK YOU
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It is longer and more complicated that it need be: We regret to inform you that the main 700-mm water pipe supplying X town was damaged by X Company on the morning of November 4th. The main p umping from X and Y stations has been stopped to allow repairs, and this will result in a total stoppage of water flow to X town during the whole day of repair work .
- It is longer and more complicated that it need be: We regret to inform you that the main 700-mm water pipe supplying X town was damaged by X Company on the morning of November 4th.
- The main p umping from X and Y stations has been stopped to allow repairs, and this will result in a total stoppage of water flow to X town during the whole day of repair work .
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It is longer and more complicated that it need be:
We regret to inform you that the main 700-mm water pipe supplying X town was damaged by X Company on the morning of November 4th. The main pumping from X and Y stations has been stopped to allow repairs, and this will result in a total stoppage of water flow to X town during the
We regret to inform you that the main 700-mm water pipe supplying X town was damaged by X Company on the morning of November 4th. The main pumping from X and Y stations has been stopped to allow repairs, and this will result in a total stoppage of water flow to X town during the
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And actually, the most important thing people need to know is that there will be no water, so start with that.
We regret to inform you that on November 20, there will no water supplied to Grammar City. This is to repair the main 700-mm water pipe that was damaged on November 4. Water will be restored as soon as the pipe has been repaired.
We regret to inform you that on November 20, there will no water supplied to Grammar City. This is to repair the main 700-mm water pipe that was damaged on November 4. Water will be restored as soon as the pipe has been repaired.
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It's not always a matter of grammar. Think from the perspective of the person who is getting the notification. What is the thing they care about? What day the line was damaged? Who damaged it? That there is a pump station that will be offline? Or that they won't have water for an entire day? The last thing, obviously - so focus on that.
If you wanted to be even more informative, you could
If you wanted to be even more informative, you could
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