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The given bar chart illustrates the research about how often people in five Australian cities consume tea and coffee

Overall, the initial impression from the chart is the number of people went to a coffee or tea in last 4 weeks make up the majority, followed with instant buying coffee and the amount of people who bought fresh coffee account the least percentage.

In terms of the most significant feature of the chart, the rate of people going to the café in Australia share the highest proportion, while the highest figure was in Melbourne with 63%, Brisbane saw the least amount with over 55%. The figure was followed by the consumption of instant coffee with the most and the least percentage was 55% and 45%, respectively.

Otherwise, the proportion of people buying fresh coffee experience the least figure. Sydney and Melbourne share the approximately of 45%, followed by Hobart which accounted for 38%, then Brisbane and Adelaide show the same figures with nearly 35%