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Topic: Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views.

A school of thoughts believe that keeping animals in cages is amusing and essential to the environment, while others claim that it is totally wrong. In this essay, I am going to talk about two sides of that argument.

On the one hand, zoos are both entertaining and ecologically vital. People find it appealing because they have not had chances to see such creatures frequently. That is to say, they are attracted to the unusual actions of these animals, the ones that are totally different from the easily found such as dog, cat. For example, people could be extremely excitied to play with a monkey in the zoo, knowing that monkey is quite hard to be encountered on a daily basis. Moreover, to some extent, putting animals in zoos could play a significant role to the environment. In recent years, there are more and more animals being on the edge of extinction, which could make our ecology be incredibly horrible. Therefore, people consider zoo such an absolutely safe place for those to reside, giving them a chance to recover their desents.

On the other hand, a multitude of people claims that it is totally untrue to force animals to be in zoos. First, although it could keep some rare creatures being away from extinction, it could bring death to others. For example, some zoos try to put tropical bears under the lives in cooler areas, pressure them to adapt. However, the bears does not only not change to the circumstances but it is also weakened by the incompatible temperature, leading to the death. Second, all animals on the Earth are equal. There is still no official approval or assembly between animals that votes for humans to be the number one creature in the world. Therefore, humans can not claim that they are the best in the universe, which means it is totally worng of them to take others away from their original homes if they do not ask for. All living creatures have their own rights to live in their own ways, out there in the nature, not being in zoos.

To conclude, keeping animals in zoos could bring about a sense of joy accompanied by preserving the nature. Nevertheless, animals do not deserve to be confined behind the bars but to live in the nature.