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The given line chart illustrates how much wheat was sold overseas by 3 specific countries over the course of 5 years starting from 1985.

As can be observed from the chart, it is clearly evident that Canada exported more wheat than the other two countries for most time frame shown. However, while the exportations of Canada and European witnessed an upward trend, that of Australia tended to decline throughout the studied period.

In 1985, the amount of wheat exported by Canada registered the highest among 3 regions, standing at about 19 millions of tonnes. The year 1988 experienced a second highest hit in the amount of wheat sent overseas in Canada, peaking at 25 million tonnes, before hitting the bottom of around 14 million tonnes in the following year.

European Community exported 17 million tonnes of wheat in 1985. By 1990, this figure was the highest at 21 million tonnes. By contrast, the level of wheat exports from Australia remained the lowest in both 1985 and 1990, with exports figure stood at 15 million tonnes and 11 million tonnes respectively.

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Although it is grammatical, native speakers would not write "The year *** experienced" or "Exports witnessed". These are unnatural subject-verb combinations. People do things like witness and experience, not inanimate objects.)

The ~~given~~ line chart (wrong word. This is not a chart.) illustrates how much wheat was

The ~~given~~ line chart (wrong word. This is not a chart.) illustrates how much wheat was sold (wrong word) overseas by 3 (write out small numbers in formal essays. See the heading.) specific countries (Which three countries?) over the course of 5 years starting from 1985.

~~As can be observed from the chart, it is clearly evident that~~ (This is your opinion. Do not write opinions or conclusions in Task 1.) Canada exported more wheat than the other two countries for most (missing words) time frame shown. (... for the first four years and was surpassed by the European Community in the last two years.) However, while the exportations of Canada and European ~~witnessed~~ had an upward trend, that of Australia tended to decline throughout the ~~studied~~ period. Even though there were differences in the exports of the individual countries, the net total was relatively constant over the period, at just over 50 million tonnes. There was an anomaly in 1989, when the total declined about 15%, at 44 million tonnes.

In 1985, the amount of wheat exported by Canada registered the highest among 3 regions, (was higher than the other two countries) standing at about 19 millions of tonnes. (wrong expression) ~~The year 1988 experienced a second highest hit in the amount of wheat sent overseas in Canada, peaking~~ This peaked at 25 million tonnes in 1988 and declined almost 50% to ~~before hitting the bottom of around~~ 14 million tonnes in the following year. In this year, Canada lost its first-place standing to Australia.

(Missing word) European Community exported 17 million tonnes of wheat in 1985. By 1990, ~~this figure~~ it was the highest (reached its maximum value) at 21 million tonnes. By contrast, the level of wheat exports from Australia remained the lowest in both 1985 and 1990, with wheat exports at ~~figure stood at~~ 15 million tonnes and 11 million tonnes respectively.

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