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GrammarLearner Posted 15 years ago
Grammar
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Hi... Guys. My exam is approaching.And i am still pondering how to write a good composition in my test. My mother as a teacher and my brother as a Cambridge stundent said my grammar is weak. I realized that too... I love to write about stories such as "A Kidnap","Robbery" or "A trip to ____ Island", because i believe i can write better for those titles. But i am weak on these titles :"importance of newspaper", "article about some food"...
Examples of my beginning of compositions for a kidnap:
The gibbous moon had completed its tour for the night and had now been replaced by the shining brightly sun. The enormous sun also examined everyone when they were asleep soundly and rised slowly. As yesterday night was raining cats and dogs,there were some marks were still lingered in the air,liberating fresh air. The white fluffy clouds were blotting out in the orange sky. The radiance from the sun woke me up and faced towards the window in my chamber room, refreshing my mind and regaining my energy by watching the green trees and leaves that reflects harmony. I spotted a few of birds chirping and hint to wake everyone whom were still sleeping on their bed.
Elaboration of A trip to island:
We proceeded to the jungle and had some jungle trekking activities.The ground is so slippery and alot of muds blotted out from the ground. Leeches were felling from the trees in the green canopy. Leech is a parasitism.It sucks blood to survive. If we loss too much of blood, we would pass out first, then die if the condition is too bad.
The serene scenery is incredible. The white sandy beach with the soft sand, the waves flowing frontwards but not backwards mirrors the nature's bravily. There is also a huge colourful shell that exist from time immemorial, it's so attractive. The tranquility i found out there converted my despair, sorrow and sad into happiness and joy!
Ending:
My desire to go to an island was fulfilled. I hope there will still a key to unlock the door inside my heart. This trip gave me alot of knowledge and lighted my wisdom.
Okay, guys. can you all help me on my English?
Examples of my beginning of compositions for a kidnap:
The gibbous moon had completed its tour for the night and had now been replaced by the shining brightly sun. The enormous sun also examined everyone when they were asleep soundly and rised slowly. As yesterday night was raining cats and dogs,there were some marks were still lingered in the air,liberating fresh air. The white fluffy clouds were blotting out in the orange sky. The radiance from the sun woke me up and faced towards the window in my chamber room, refreshing my mind and regaining my energy by watching the green trees and leaves that reflects harmony. I spotted a few of birds chirping and hint to wake everyone whom were still sleeping on their bed.
Elaboration of A trip to island:
We proceeded to the jungle and had some jungle trekking activities.The ground is so slippery and alot of muds blotted out from the ground. Leeches were felling from the trees in the green canopy. Leech is a parasitism.It sucks blood to survive. If we loss too much of blood, we would pass out first, then die if the condition is too bad.
The serene scenery is incredible. The white sandy beach with the soft sand, the waves flowing frontwards but not backwards mirrors the nature's bravily. There is also a huge colourful shell that exist from time immemorial, it's so attractive. The tranquility i found out there converted my despair, sorrow and sad into happiness and joy!
Ending:
My desire to go to an island was fulfilled. I hope there will still a key to unlock the door inside my heart. This trip gave me alot of knowledge and lighted my wisdom.
Okay, guys. can you all help me on my English?
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Hello GrammarLearner and welcome to the forums. Your mother and your brother are correct. You need serious assistance, not only with your grammar but in several other areas as well.
- Hello GrammarLearner and welcome to the forums.
- Your mother and your brother are correct.
- You need serious assistance, not only with your grammar but in several other areas as well.
- What are you looking for?
- How can we help you?
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Hello GrammarLearner and welcome to the forums.
Your mother and your brother are correct. You need serious assistance, not only with your grammar but in several other areas as well.
What are you looking for? How can we help you? Your request in unclear to me.
You provided 2 different texts. Do you want us to correct or comment on them?
Please state your needs m
Your mother and your brother are correct. You need serious assistance, not only with your grammar but in several other areas as well.
What are you looking for? How can we help you? Your request in unclear to me.
You provided 2 different texts. Do you want us to correct or comment on them?
Please state your needs m
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Correct those errors and teach me the way to improve my grammar please. If you like to comment, welcome. I really need to improve my English as soon as possible.
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