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Amiramim Posted 13 years ago
Grammar

hi everyone,can you correct this for me,I really need your help

It was a moment of fear ,I was in that bus and suddenly I saw another bus coming toward us with a very big speed, I thought that i was going to die , I saw death in front of me and I couldn't think of anything,I didn't even get the sense of praying or something ,although it was a very short moment , it seemed to me that it was an eternity .In a moment like that we realize how short this life is ,and even if we are alive for a hundered years we are not ready to die yet.We want to be with our family,husbans and wives ..to see the sun every morning and smell the flowers ,to laugh and cry ,to be happy and sad ;We can accept the hard moments of life but are still afraid of leaving it.Death is part of life ,more than that it's the most important part.We are alive only for years and we'll be death for centuries ,everybody knows it but few of us really think about it.We live in constant fear ,nobody wants to get sick or have an accident and leave his family, but we know that we can't do anything to prevent it and it can happen at any unexpected moment .Allah's power is beyond all of us,but the question is:" Why do people continue to do bad things knowing that they are going to die someday?" And" why do people make the same mistakes when they have a second chance?"
THANK YOU
  

Top answer

You have a writers' disease I call "commatitis". Too many commas, incorrectly used. ("comma splice").

  • You have a writers' disease I call "commatitis".
  • Too many commas, incorrectly used.
  • ("comma splice").
  • I have highlighted some places that need attention.
  • It was a moment of fear ,I was in that bus and suddenly I saw another bus coming toward us with a very big (speed is never big.
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You have a writers' disease I call "commatitis". Too many commas, incorrectly used. ("comma splice"). I have highlighted some places that need attention.

It was a moment of fear ,I was in that bus and suddenly I saw another bus coming toward us with a very big (speed is never big. It can be h
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