Hi Everyone, i am applying for a job at Sky tv. It would be great if you can check my choice of words ......many thanks

6. Please detail up to three examples that show us your interest for the media and technology industry, why you want to work for Sky and/or why you want to work for the Sky strategy team (consider work experience, interests/activities, training/specialist skills or hobbies that highlight this). (200 words max).
• The reason for my application is because I am a business minded person with great passion for media. I developed my business management skill during the bachelor degree of Management at Manchester University. Practically during my internship at ANZ bank in 2010, I studied the strategic aspect of the banking industry by analysing business strategies, financial budgeting and capital investment with support from the senior management team. Besides the love with business, I also passionate about media and love to work in this fast paced industry. This is the reason why I took one year Practical Film Making at MetFilm School in London. During my time at school, I focused on both the creative and business side of television and filmmaking. An internship at Sky strategy will help me integrate my skills gained from previous working experience to be a professional strategist in media industry.