HI, CAN YOU HELP ME REVIEW MY ESSAY, PLEASE? (IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - NOISE )

Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. discuss both views and give your opinion.

You should write at least 250 words.

My essay:

People have different views about whether essential measures should be apply to control noise. While many individuals think that they have the freedom to make noise if they want, I believe that it would be better to reduce noise.

On the one hand, many people think that they have the right to make noise as they want for several reasons. First, people feel more comfortable and free when creating sounds while working or amusementing. For instance, turning the volume louder to enjoy music make them feel relaxed after a long day of work, although this may disturb their next-door neighbours. Second, a lot of people often consider noise as a part of the industrialization and modernization process, therefore this is inevitable. This means that traffic sounds or engine noise are likely to become more familiar to urban citizens. Therefore, they feel that there is no specific reason to must control noise.

On the other hand, I believe that it is more beneficial if setting strict rules to manage noise. Firstly, noise has negative impacts on human health. For examples, some my friends can not sleep at night only because of intrusive sounds from a nearby industrial zone. This means that if this situation lasts, it lead to a deterioration in people’s mental and physical health. In addition, work productivity may be decreased by noise. A lot of white-collar workers say that they can not focus on their work as a consequence of sounds which are generated ceaselessly from several means of transport on road.

In conclusion, although many people still insist on making a lot of noise without any consideration for others, I believe that noise should be limited to have a better life.