Hi! Can you guys check my essay for me? Thank you so much! Topic : Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals...

Everybody is a special individual, including children. However, parents often believe that they should help their childs building personalities by making every decisions for them. In my opinion, it is not a good way to raise a child. As a mother, I strongly believe that children have the rights to decide what they want to do or like to eat, etc
Making choices for children prevents them from doing the harmful and waste of times issues. For example, parents choose which channels are suitable for children. Because they may can access to some adults's channels such as violence or sexual movies. More than that, if a kid is obesity, parents have to reduce some fat foods and increase the amount of vegetables on her meals. Thanks to their parents, kids can lose weight. However the more children rely on their parents, the more lazy they are. Consequently, they become dependent on their parents and selfish .
On the other hand, people who themselves experiences all the matters will be more grown up and wilder than others. For instance, if a kid want to wear whatever they want, we should first let them match everything by their own . The reason is dressing is one way to express ourselves. Nevertheless, their outfits maynot looks nice. In that case, we should give them some advices and encourage them to do better next time. In addition, if mother love dancing and her daughter love drawing, we should let her follow her passion. We shouldn't put our dream on someone else, especially our childs. What we want we should take it by our hands. Children are very sweet and pure like diamonds. It just can be shine if we sharpen it correctly. That's is why parents 's missions is helping children do the right things not push them to obey us.
To sum up, children need special care so thay they can expand their knowledge. I believe that they can make their own decisions about matters that affect them. Parents should be their guide and partner through their life journey.