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About the Statue of Liberty

Everybody know that the Statue of Liberty the classic emblem of New York is and it symbolise the freedom of the world. When one shipping with the boat to New York, strike it. But today you must make a very expensive boattour to admire she.

The Statue of Liberty was a present by the French to the American folk. The statuary Frédéric-Auguste Bartholdi has designed she. He works 21 years on his idea. On the 28 of the October 1886 was she after a hard work finished and becomed adept.

The Statue of Liberty is over copper plates revetted steel structure, it makes from the designer res the Eiffel Tower. The Statue of Liberty by the head of flear a height of 46 m and is 225 t big.The statue is with a crown decorated, she had seven shines.

The mighty, star- shaped tribune, where the woman stands onto, is embedded
between the walls of an old army fort. It was at its time the biggest casted
solid concrete block. The statue of Liberty was anchored by a supporting
stand into the socket, which also has a height of 47m.

The statue of Liberty is also a vantage point onto Manhattan. Admittedly
you've to queue quite long to reach into the statue at all, and than you'll
be already pushed out again by the succeeding visitors.
Two ways joins into the statue: An elevator drives up to a small outlook
terrace, and a spiral staircase with 168 steps guides the visitors to the
observation deck inside the crown of the statue of Liberty.
  

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This is how I would word this (in general, changes are underlined, deletions are crossed out, additions are in bold): About the Statue of Liberty Everybody know s that the Statue of Liberty is the classic emblem of New York is and it symbolise s the freedom of the world. [Unclear what you want to say: When ships came to New York, they would pass by it. )] But today you must make a very expensive boat tour to admire she her.

  • This is how I would word this (in general, changes are underlined, deletions are crossed out, additions are in bold): About the Statue of Liberty Everybody know s that the Statue of Liberty is the classic emblem of New York is and it symbolise s the freedom of the world.
  • [Unclear what you want to say: When ships came to New York, they would pass by it.
  • )] But today you must make a very expensive boat tour to admire she her.
  • The Statue of Liberty was a present by from the French to the American folk.
  • The statuary sculptor Frédéric-Auguste Bartholdi has designed she her .
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This is how I would word this (in general, changes are underlined, deletions are crossed out, additions are in bold):

About the Statue of Liberty

Everybody knows that the Statue of Liberty is the classic emblem of New York is and it symbolises the freedom of the world. When one shipping with the boat to New York, st

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