Here is my letter of motivation. thanks for help

dear Mr. Mountainhiker
here i have my letter of mitivation for prosgraduate programme of british schools. please help me to modify it. your help is appreciated!

here goes the writing:
Letter of motivation

Dear Sir or Madam:
Having completed my Bachelor’s degree programme of International Business in Finland, I am eager for a new experience of study with the postgraduate programme of *** at your university.

Born as a Chinese boy, I have been working hard to achieve every goal of study in the crowds of intense competition. After graduated from my secondary high school, it then became a significant point of turn that I chose to participate in the entrance examination to the university where I am instead of normally to a Chinese one. The reason why it happened was that I felt confident in an international environment than people around me. Finally, I made it. Hence I realized that the cornerstone of my achievement was diligence.

The four years of high quality education in Finland has brought me a wide range of theoretical cognition and some practical experience regarding international business, especially in the marketing relevant area which is my favourite. Moreover, it helped me to efficiently adapt myself to the western social surroundings as well as the education system. As it is required inevitably in the modern business, multi-cultural communication and integration have great impact on international business operations. The familiarity of different cultural backgrounds, communication skills has now made me strengthen my confidence. Meanwhile, I am still on my way of enhancement. At this moment I realize that the support of my current optimistic condition is experience.

For trials during my career, I worked for internship in a Chinese governmental institution as a consultant for students planning to go abroad and also, in a joint venture medical equipment company as an internship marketing coordinator. The real-work situations brought me problems as well as the pride from individual achievements. They warned me about the key role of advanced strategy applications in the marketing projects handling, communication with trade partners and the analysis of development plans. Thus, I am ready to pursue it for further improvement.

Of course, nothing venture nothing gain. The Nordic countries such as Finland have their own business concepts. Involved with regional characteristics, it appears with the impression of stable, conservative, and extremely ethic. While the UK is one of the leaders in western business dealers. Integrated features of business methodology and people with creative value enable the well development of strategies. While it is considered to be a remarkable investment with risks involved to obtain an education experience in the UK. Nevertheless, the spirit of challenge is undoubtedly necessary for the final reward. And that is just what leads me to this promising land.

Finally, what else am I supposed to be equipped besides the mentioned above? A good luck perhaps. I will be patiently looking forward to it as well as your positive reply. Your help is greatly appreciated.



Faithfully
Chen Bei