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Her responsibilities included: acquisition of sponsors?

Hi,
I am writing a letter of confirmation for people who have taken part in the organization of a student conference, for them to attach to CVs and the like.
The letter opens with a general statement that so-and-so has participated in the organization of the conference, then comes a list of responsibilities, with boxes to tick "where appropriate."

It currently reads:

His/her responsibilities included:
( ) planning the budget
( ) the acquisition of sponsors
( ) the organization of the social programme
( ) the allocation of conference rooms
( ) ...

There are two problems with this: firstly, most of the lines now start with the definite article, which, too me, seems somewhat repetitious. Secondly, there is the odd mixture of grammatical constructions: gerund "planning the budget" vs. noun phrase "the acquisition of sponsors."

My idea was that the introductory phrase "his/her responsibilities included" and the list items should somehow "match", to give a grammatical sentence.
Am I worrying too much? Do you think I could just leave the definite article out, so that the list would read:

His/her responsibilities included:
( ) planning the budget
( ) acquisition of sponsors
( ) organization of the social programme
( ) allocation of conference rooms
( ) ...

Or would that sound strange?
The obvious solution, of course, would be to use "-ing"-forms throughout. However, I thought that it would sound too much like the organizers had done these things for years, as part of a job, when the conference was in fact a single event.
Am I right? Or worrying too much, again?
I'd be very glad to hear your views on this (this thing is to be printed tomorrow, and I am turning quite desperate right now..)

Thanks in advance,
Julia
  

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[nq:1]Hi, I am writing a letter of confirmation for people who have taken part in the organization of a student ... "his/her responsibilities included" and the list items should somehow "match", to give a grammatical sentence. [/nq] Yes.

  • [nq:1]Hi, I am writing a letter of confirmation for people who have taken part in the organization of a student ...
  • "his/her responsibilities included" and the list items should somehow "match", to give a grammatical sentence.
  • [/nq] Yes.
  • [nq:1]Do you think I could just leave the definite article out, so that the list would read: His/her responsibilities ...
  • acquisition of sponsors ( ) organization of the social programme ( ) allocation of conference rooms ( ) ...
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[nq:1]Hi, I am writing a letter of confirmation for people who have taken part in the organization of a student ... "his/her responsibilities included" and the list items should somehow "match", to give a grammatical sentence. Am I worrying too much?[/nq]
Yes.
[nq:1]Do you think I could just leave the definite article out, so that the list would read: His/her responsibilities ... acquisiti
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Julia Steiner wrote on 15 Feb 2005:
[nq:1]Hi, I am writing a letter of confirmation for people who have taken part in the organization of a student ... was that the introductory phrase "his/her responsibilities included" and the list items should somehow "match", to give a grammatical sentence.[/nq]
That's a matter of style. Your gut feeling is correct: they should all match for it to be g
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[nq:1]Julia Steiner wrote on 15 Feb 2005:[/nq]
[nq:2]Hi, I am writing a letter of confirmation for people ... ( ) the allocation of conference rooms ( ) ...[/nq]
[nq:1]I think all the responsibilities ought to have the same // grammatical form, but I like parallel structures. Adrian seems not to mind stylistic mess. I also perfer verbals to noun phrases with prepositions, especially "of".[
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There's another thing maybe it's just me, but I don't like acquisition of sponsors. I think "recruiting" or "recruitment of" might be better. "Acquisition" suggests more ownership than warranted, at least to me. Perhaps, even just plain "finding" might be better.
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[nq:1] His/her responsibilities included: ( ) planning the budget ( ) the acquisition of sponsors ( ) the organization of the social programme ( ) the allocation of conference rooms ( ) ... [/nq]
Maybe you're thinking too much about making the phrases parallel, when you should be thinking more about making sure the phrases accurately describe what the person has accomplished.
How about rea
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Skitt wrote on 16 Feb 2005:
[nq:1]There's another thing maybe it's just me, but I don't like acquisition of sponsors. I think "recruiting" or "recruitment of" might be better. "Acquisition" suggests more ownership than warranted, at least to me. Perhaps, even just plain "finding" might be better.[/nq]
Good point.

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There's another thing maybe it's just me, but
I don't like acquisition of sponsors. I think "recruiting" or "recruitment of" might be better. "Acquisition" suggests more ownership than warranted, at least to me.
Perhaps, even just plain "finding" might be better.
You and me and Julio down at the schoolyard. And most people till a decade or two ago. But nowadays there are 358,000
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[nq:1]There's another thing maybe it's just me, but I don't like acquisition of sponsors. I think "recruiting" or "recruitment ... schoolyard. And most people till a decade or two ago. But nowadays there are 358,000 GoogleWeb hits for "customer acquisition".[/nq]
Yes, and I think it's a little unfortunate: "acquisition" has a clear meaning in business, and it's a pity to dilute it. Anot
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[nq:1]Maybe you're thinking too much about making the phrases parallel, when you should be thinking more about making sure the ... ) recruitment of sponsors ( ) organization of the social programme ( ) conference room allocation ( ) ... etc.[/nq]
That would indeed have been a good idea (the best, I think), but some of the phrases are quite long, and they'd have become clumsy if I'd done that.
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[nq:2]There's another thing maybe it's just me, but I ... But nowadays there are 358,000 GoogleWeb hits for "customer acquisition".[/nq]
[nq:1]Yes, and I think it's a little unfortunate: "acquisition" has a clear meaning in business, and it's a pity to ... looking out for nice new butch words, just as military writers are always looking for nice new long-haired ones. Mike.[/nq]
O.k., I've

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