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Dear Sir/Madam,
I have been graduated from the University Of xxx Faculty Of Medicine with degree of bachelor in medicine and surgery (MB.ChB) with scored the very good grade . Then I spent one year of training at xxx University Teaching Hospitals as well as previously received training for two months at xxx hospital in xxx , nowadays practicing as a general physician.
Started interesting in German language when I was in college, later on I joined to the German language Institute for two levels but unfortunately I couldn’t keep studying their due to the general events in xxx and closure of institute .therefore I moved to xxx and joined to DFA institute for learning language, In addition of that I have obtained ÖSD Zertifikat A2.
I have been granted a 6 months Hospitation in Asklepios Klink ,Sankt Augstin in department of Pediatric Cardiac Surgery and Pediatric Intensive Care, starting from 1st July 2016.During this period I will have a chance to recognize the theoretical,scientifical and technological development of Germany in the field of Medicine as general and Pediatric Surgery in specific , which is my life dream to be a pediatric surgeon and that would gain me a valuable experience that I can utilize it when I back home.
Prior to this, I will be attended to intensive language courses at IFS institute in Bonn, in order to improving my German language skills which is considered the cornerstone to ensure the best benefit as much as possible from training period as well as in my ability to communicate with doctors and patients alike .in addition, learning German will be of great help for my future career in which allow me to read German medical journals, medical research, participate in conferences and keep me updates.
Deutschland is the origin of German language and hometown of native speakers, from this principle I am always eager to develop my language skills with engage to the German nation and integrate with the civilization and local culture of the community. Indeed, this will encourage me to enhance and strengthen my speaking and hearing skills excellently.
Undoubtedly, Germany is considered a superpower and a succeed country in the business and financial world. However, a city like Bonn with its originally civilization ,ancient cathedral , tradition architecture and the beautiful Rhine River that Adorns it, would attractive me .Moreover it holds a plenty of history, literature and music art where the famous musician Beethoven has been born , really it would be a great life experience and opportunity that never forgettable.