HELP!! Writing a letter of purpose for grad school

Hello, thanks for taking the time to look at my post. I need to submit my letter of purpose for grad school soon and was wanting some feedback or corrections anyone might suggest.

To whom it may concern,

I am writing to express my interest in applying for a Master´s Degree in Global and International Studies at the University of ************ for the fall 2011 semester. This program in particular caught my interest, because of the flexibility of classes offered at the Edwards Campus and emphasis on the knowledge and skills that are necessary to compete in the international job sector.

I obtained my Bachelor of Arts in International Studies and Spanish from ************ University in December 2009. I have had a respectable academic record despite a vigorous course load which enabled me to complete before my scheduled graduation date. During my undergraduate career, I was involved in on-campus organizations such as the Spanish Club and Hispanics of Today. I was the campus coordinator for Hispanics of Today, which is an organization established to promote Hispanic culture and diversity on campus through fundraisers and campus activities. Every year our organization acts as representatives from our university at the United States Hispanic Leadership Institute conference, which is an internationally recognized Latino organization where they promote youth empowerment and civic responsibility to young Latino students.

During my time at **************, I was given the opportunity to study abroad in India and various countries South America where I was attended economic and cultural lectures offered by our host organizations. My study abroad experiences were a positive catalyst for my self-discovery and maturation. Study abroad had a major impact on my life by giving me first hand knowledge of different cultural, economic, and political systems and expanding my intercultural development. I believe that both my study abroad experiences and now my current position living overseas has sparked my interest in the international job sector, and that has been reinforced by helping citizens of my country who are embracing a new experience.

Since completing my undergraduate degree, I have been living in Palencia, Spain where I am a North American Language and Cultural Assistant through the Ministry of Education of Spain. I currently work as a teaching assistant, sharing my knowledge of the English language and North American culture in a public high school. I am sure that knowledge of Spanish and English will be an advantage in obtaining a Master´s Degree in Global and International Studies as well as working in public service.

My career aim is to obtain employment with the Department of State in the United States government relating to consular affairs and Foreign Service. When I moved abroad, I found contentment in meeting with the consular office who informed me about all my rights as a citizen of the United States living abroad by offering support and consular assistance. I would like to acquire a strong background in strategic and analytical thinking as well knowledge and managerial skills to which would better prepare me for public service for U.S. citizens and interests abroad.

In conclusion, I would like to say that I am eager to gain new experiences and knowledge and feel that this program is the best way to achieve my goal. I am positive that a Master´s Degree in Global and International Studies from the University of Kansas will give me a proper foundation and will offer a diverse learning environment for my professional career.



Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.



Sincerely,