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Ciara Elson Posted 11 years ago
Help with writing in iambic pentametre!
Hi everyone, this is my first ever post on the forum!
I am have been experimenting with iambic pentametre and would just like to your help to improve it ...
Prior warning to all: proceed with care
Here's just a thought, protect your ears
A muff, or bud, perhaps can be of use
To masking dreaded tones that come from me
But don't you fret, I promise to shed no tears
So long as minds are not to be closed
Or better yet, why not just set them free.
It's not great but what do you think?
I am have been experimenting with iambic pentametre and would just like to your help to improve it ...
Prior warning to all: proceed with care
Here's just a thought, protect your ears
A muff, or bud, perhaps can be of use
To masking dreaded tones that come from me
But don't you fret, I promise to shed no tears
So long as minds are not to be closed
Or better yet, why not just set them free.
It's not great but what do you think?
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Hello, Ciara Elson—and welcome to English Forums. Thank you for registering as a member. I have moved your post to our Poetry Forum.
- Hello, Ciara Elson—and welcome to English Forums.
- Thank you for registering as a member.
- I have moved your post to our Poetry Forum.
- Please be sure to choose the most appropriate forum for your questions.
- Iambic pentameter is five feet of < unstressed, stressed > for every line, like this: u / u / u / u / u / Your lines fail to accomplish this.
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Hello, Ciara Elson—and welcome to English Forums. Thank you for registering as a member. I have moved your post to our Poetry Forum. Please be sure to choose the most appropriate forum for your questions.
Iambic pentameter is five feet of < unstressed, stressed > for every line, like this:
u / u / u / u / u /
Your lines fail to accomplish this. Their erratic patte
Iambic pentameter is five feet of < unstressed, stressed > for every line, like this:
u / u / u / u / u /
Your lines fail to accomplish this. Their erratic patte
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The following would be IP (although the logic is dicey):
To ^all a ^warning ^to pro^ceed with ^care.
A^bove all ^do re^mind: Pro^tect your ^ears!
A ^****, or ^buds, per^haps can ^be of ^use. (This line is okay, except it should be "buds.")
To ^mask the ^dreaded ^tones that ^come from ^me.
But ^don't you ^fret, I ^promise ^no more ^tears.
So ^
To ^all a ^warning ^to pro^ceed with ^care.
A^bove all ^do re^mind: Pro^tect your ^ears!
A ^****, or ^buds, per^haps can ^be of ^use. (This line is okay, except it should be "buds.")
To ^mask the ^dreaded ^tones that ^come from ^me.
But ^don't you ^fret, I ^promise ^no more ^tears.
So ^
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