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Hi,
WElcome to the Forum.

My first overall comment is that you have written all this as one single long sentence. This makes it hard for the reader to see your meaning clearly.

Please revise it into several separate sentences, with appropriate capital letters and periods. Then repost it, and I'll be happy to look at it again.

Best wishes, Clive

Hey thx for the welcome Clive, well this text it would be the first paragraph in a complete essay, and it's introducing some of the main ideas of my essay that later are going to be discussed, well but it is only a practice, and I only wanna know if you understand me or there are critical grammar errors because this is my first formal paragraph. ok I'm gonna try to write a complete essay and post

Hi,
Okay. But what you have done is just jam several sentences together as one long one, wihout proper conjunctions or punctuation. You need to understand that these are critical grammar errors.

My advice is that you should try to correct these problems with your first paragraph, before you write the rest of the essay. Otherwise, you will just make the same mistakes again and again.

Clive, I got it!!!!, sorry I'm a little silly , thank you man, yes you right, here's my intent to correct the paragraph.

Hi,

Universities should offer more distance learning courses to accommodate the needs of the students in some countries in Latin America.

In my view, the universities in Latin America should have some distance learning courses. This point of view is especially important in third world countries. Because of their economic situation, many students have to work at the same ti

Hi Clive, thank you again for your time and advices, this corrections are helping me a lot. Well, in the words "heavily charged" I tried to say "exhausting". I think this word, it would have fitted better.

Greetings,
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