0
Destro_prime Posted 20 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

help with thesis statement, is this good enough?

The discovery and eventual dependence on oil has helped shape the culture of the southern United States for the better.

note- college level writing class

thanks!
  

Top answer

what about: The discovery and eventual dependence on oil is responsible for the current southern culture of the United States.

  • what about: The discovery and eventual dependence on oil is responsible for the current southern culture of the United States.
Free · every Monday

Get the Weekly English Kit 📬

New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.

3 Answers
0
what about:

The discovery and eventual dependence on oil is responsible for the current southern culture of the United States.
0
it also has to be 10 pages long

do i need to make the thesis statement more specific or what?
0
I would stick with 'helped to shape' rather than responsible for. If you say it is responsible for, then you are saying it is the only factor that has contributed to southern culture. I think you'd have a hard job proving that.

Related Questions