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Fizzi Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Help with short sentences

Hi all,

Can somebody please comments my English?

1- We will decide what we should do upon receiving the news from the X on his application.

2- My youngest son is sick and taking a medicine on daily basis.

3- Physicians will decide what is the best for her after scanning her kidneys in April.

Regards,

Fizzi
  

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Hi Fizzi, Can somebody please comments my English? 1- We will decide what we should do upon receiving the news from the X on his application. There's a bit of ambiguity here.

— Clive

  • Hi Fizzi, Can somebody please comments my English?
  • 1- We will decide what we should do upon receiving the news from the X on his application.
  • There's a bit of ambiguity here.
  • Does 'upon receiving' relate to 'decide' or 'do'?
  • 'About' is more common than 'on'.
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Hi Fizzi,
Can somebody please comments my English?

1- We will decide what we should do upon receiving the news from the X on his application.
There's a bit of ambiguity here. Does 'upon receiving' relate to 'decide' or 'do'?

'About' is more common than 'on'.


2- My youngest son is sick and taking a medicine on a daily basis.

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Hi Clive,

How about this?

Upon receiving the news from the X about his application, we will decide what we should do accordingly.

Fizzi
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Hi,
How about this?

Upon receiving the news from the X about his application, we will decide what we should do accordingly.

Do you really need 'accordingly'?

Do you mean 'news' or 'results'?
eg Upon receiving the results of his application from the X, we will decide what we should do.

Clive
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Hi Clive,

I believe "results" is the right word. Thanks for your help and guidance.

Regards,

Fizzi
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