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Fizzi Posted 18 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Help with sentences

Can somebody please comments my English?
Regards,
Fizzi

1- In this review all studies consistently point at the same direction: serious problems with the quality of information in internet advertising.

2- A total of 45 of the 49 studies reviewed were conducted after 2000.

3- The results are disturbing, however the X (name of an organization) does not take any necessary action based on the findings.

4- Since 2000, the organization has failed to review the ethical criteria concerning advertising via internet.

5- As the criteria lay the foundation for proper behaviour concerning the internet advertising , our results indicate the need for X to be proactive in updating requirement for these activities.
  

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Hi, 1- In this review, all studies consistently point in the same direction: serious problems with the quality of information in internet advertising. 2- A total of 45 of the 49 studies reviewed were conducted after 2000. 3- The results are disturbing, yet however the X (name of an organization) does not take any necessary action based on the findings.

  • Hi, 1- In this review, all studies consistently point in the same direction: serious problems with the quality of information in internet advertising.
  • 2- A total of 45 of the 49 studies reviewed were conducted after 2000.
  • 3- The results are disturbing, yet however the X (name of an organization) does not take any necessary action based on the findings.
  • 4- Since 2000, the organization has failed to review the ethical criteria concerning internet advertising.
  • It's not clear to me what you mean by 'as' here.
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Hi,

1- In this review, all studies consistently point in the same direction: serious problems with the quality of information in internet advertising.

2- A total of 45 of the 49 studies reviewed were conducted after 2000.

3- The results are disturbing, yet however the X (name of an organization) does not take any necessary action based on the findings.
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Dear Clive,

"As the criteria lay the foundation for proper behaviour concerning the internet advertising , our results indicate the need for X to be proactive in updating the requirements for these activities.It's not clear to me what you mean by 'as' here. Is there some cause and effect?"

The X (an organization) introduce an ethical criteria which lay foundation to other partie
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Hi,
Can you perhaps say 'because' or 'since' instead of 'as'?
Clive
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Hi Clive,

Thank you very much for your help.

Regards,

Fizzi

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