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Dear members.I have written a small paragraph about Bridge;I will be appreciated if anyone checked it for me.The Toledo Art Building is located at the Art Department in the University of Toledo. It offers students the invaluable opportunity to incorporate one of the most extraordinary collections into their studies as well as researches. The bold, sculptural building is based on a spacious green land. It is interesting to note that this landmark consists of many discrete blocks with rising and descending forms. A number of them (mainly, at the entrance) are made from glass, which project over the art capture of this sculpture, but some others are structurally connected to the anther building of the University of Toledo’s. The immense halls are mainly been located in the base and being used for exhibiting famous art collections. At present, this 80s-style landmark is admired by many architects and engineers, and I firmly hope to see it closely in the near future.  Thanks in advance.

Rafaelinrio · Accepted Answer

yadoo86Dear members.

I have written a small paragraph about Bridge;I will be appreciated if anyone checked it for me.

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The Toledo Art Building is located at the Art Department in the University of Toledo. It offers students the invaluable opportunity to incorporate one of the most extraordinary collections into their studies as well as researches. The bold, sculptural building is ~~based~~ located on a spacious green land. It is interesting to note that this landmark consists of many discrete blocks with rising and descending forms. A number of them (mainly, at the entrance) ~~are~~ is made ~~from~~ of glass, which projects over the art capture of this sculpture, but some others are structurally connected to the anther building of the University of Toledo’s. The immense halls are mainly ~~been~~ located in the base and ~~being~~ are used for exhibiting famous art collections. At present, this 80's-style landmark is admired by many architects and engineers, and I firmly hope to see it closely in the near future.

Thanks in advance.

Clive · Answer

Hi,

Where is the Bridge? Or is that the name of the building, or of the architect?

The Toledo Art Building is located at the University of Toledo Art Department. It offers students the invaluable opportunity to incorporate some of the most extraordinary art collections into their studies as well as researches. The bold, sculptured building sits in a wide green space. It is interesting to note that this landmark consists of many discrete blocks with rising and descending forms. A number of them (mainly, at the entrance) are made of glass and project over the art capture ???? of this sculpture, but some others are structurally connected to the other buildings of the University. The immense halls are mainly located in the base and are used for exhibiting famous art collections. This 80's-style landmark is admired by many architects and engineers, and I firmly hope to see it closely in the near future.
Best wishes, Clive

Yadoo86 · Answer

thanks a zillion times for ur replays.

thanks rafaelinrio for the corrections and I'm sorry Clive for the mistake.

I'm quite interested to know why we have to use OF preposition after "made" verb? is there any rule for that?

I always have problems with OF preposition, Can anyone write some rules of using this preposition?

Thanks again, and good luck for everyone,

Yadoo86 · Answer

My next version of this essay. I hope will be appreciated if anyone give me some advice to make it better.

The Toledo Art Building, which is one of the most tremendous landmarks, is located at the Art Department in the University of Toledo. In addition to offering students the invaluable opportunity to incorporate one of the most extraordinary collections into their studies as well as researches, it is considered as how an art building should be recognized as an art form.

In the area of appearance, the bold, sculptural building is positioned on a spacious green land. It is interesting to note that this landmark consists of many discrete blocks with rising and descending forms. A number of them (mainly, at the entrance) is made from glass, which projects over the art capture of this sculpture, but some others are structurally connected to the anther building of the University of Toledo. Furthermore, the immense halls have mainly been placed in the base and are used for exhibiting famous art collections.

For these reasons, this 80's-style landmark is admired by many architects and engineers. Furthermore, many new art buildings are based on this layout. Finally, I firmly hope to see it closely in the near future.

Clive · Answer

Hi,

Let me just highlight words that are not good choices, and parts which do not sound right.
Some of my earlier edits still apply to this version, ie you still have some of the same errors.

The Toledo Art Building, which is one of the most tremendous landmarks in Toledo? in the USA? in the world?, is located at the Art Department in the University of Toledo. In addition to offering students the invaluable opportunity to incorporate one of the most extraordinary collections into their studies as well as researches, it is considered as how an art building should be recognized as an art form.

In ~~the area of~~ appearance, the bold, sculptural building is positioned on a spacious green land. It is interesting to note that this landmark consists of many discrete blocks with rising and descending forms. A number of them (mainly, at the entrance) is made from glass, which projects over the art capture <<< ???? of this sculpture, but some others are structurally connected to the anther building of the University of Toledo. Furthermore, the immense halls have mainly been placed in the base and are used for exhibiting famous art collections.

For these reasons, this 80's-style landmark is admired by many architects and engineers. Furthermore, many new art buildings are based on this layout. Finally, I firmly hope to see it closely in the near future.

Clive

Clive · Answer

Hi,
I'm quite interested to know why we have to use OF preposition after "made" verb? is there any rule for that?

I always have problems with OF preposition, Can anyone write some rules of using this preposition?

You can use a number of prepositons with 'made', but 'made of' is probably the most common and straight-forward.

'Made from' sometimes suggests a transformation of the material.
eg This metal table is made from recycled Coca-Cola cans.

Best wishes, Clive

Yadoo86 · Answer

Thanks Clive... Excellent work;like every time, u always impress me.

Good luck...Best wishes.

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