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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Help with my paragraph
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I am writing a memoir. I wrote a paragraph. Could you guys help me telling any problem in my paragraph, please?
The day that my father picked me up at elementary school happened when I was only nine years old. For the first three years of school back to home, after class, was the same way. My mother or my father took me by car, and I return to home safe and comfortable. In a pleasant afternoon, everything was different. It happened like this. Like usually, after class I went to the front door of the school looking for my parents’ car. For ten minutes, I saw my friends went to home. More twenty minutes waiting and no one showed up. Many things went through my head: from be abandoned at school to monsters have attacked my family. I was only a nine years old child with an extraordinary imagination.
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I am writing a memoir. I wrote a paragraph. Could you guys help me telling any problem in my paragraph, please?
The day that my father picked me up at elementary school happened when I was only nine years old. For the first three years of school back to home, after class, was the same way. My mother or my father took me by car, and I return to home safe and comfortable. In a pleasant afternoon, everything was different. It happened like this. Like usually, after class I went to the front door of the school looking for my parents’ car. For ten minutes, I saw my friends went to home. More twenty minutes waiting and no one showed up. Many things went through my head: from be abandoned at school to monsters have attacked my family. I was only a nine years old child with an extraordinary imagination.
Thanks
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The day that my father picked me up at elementary school happened when I was only nine years old. For the first three years of school, I went home after class the same way. My mother or my father took me by car.
- The day that my father picked me up at elementary school happened when I was only nine years old.
- For the first three years of school, I went home after class the same way.
- My mother or my father took me by car.
- I returned home safe and comfortable.
- On one pleasant afternoon, everything was different.
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For the first three years of school, I went home after class the same way. My mother or my father took me by car. I returned home safe and comfortable. On one pleasant afternoon, everything was different. It happened like this.
As usual after class, I wen
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I remember the day that my father picked me up at elementary school happened when I was only nine years old. For the first three years of school I went back to home after class was the same way. My mother or my father took me by car, and I returned to home safe and comfortable. In a One pleasant afternoon, everythi
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