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Julian Adam Posted 7 years ago
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Help with Motivational Letter / Maastricht/Venlo / Review / Critics

Hello, I have not had the time to introduce myself, so I'm going to do it briefly here.
My name is Julian, I'm from Munich, in Germany, and I'm twenty-four.
I'm currently studying industrial engineering and I hope to pursue my studies abroad with a different BA program. Liberal Arts in Maastricht.
I wrote my motivation letter and I'm posting it here hoping that someone could help me correcting it and reviewing it if needed. Thank you in advance!

Program: Liberal Arts and Sciences in Maastricht/Venlo (Satellite Campus)

To whom it may concern
Dear Sir or Madam,

??I am applying for the Liberal Arts and Sciences program at the University College Maastricht/Venlo.
I understand the Liberal Arts and Science program as a process of intellectual discovery and an opportunity to constantly challenge myself in an interdisciplinary, international learning community.

I graduated from the Isar-FOS Munich in July 2014, which is a specialized secondary school that focuses on economics.

After obtaining my entrance qualification for studies at universities of applied sciences, I first started to study aerospace engineering. I soon felt that my study's program was too narrow and too technical versed for me. I was more curious about questions about space and the universe. I chose minor courses in psychology, Japanese, aesthetics, and art to quench my broad interests as I started to get uninterested. I realized that I had to switch my study's program, although I still had a general interest in aerospace engineering and engineering itself.

I changed to industrial engineering in Munich. It seemed to be a great blend of economics and technology. Sadly, I soon felt that I generally did not know what study's program was suited best for me. I again started to consider that industrial engineering was not the best fit for me. I want to learn across disciplines with problem-detecting and solving strategies.

In 2018 I started to work at "Hubert Burda Media" an international acting tech and media company. As a working student, I take care of content management and mainly write articles. I gained my first practical experience in media, literature, and psychology. It was amazing to see the impact of psychology in our media-based culture. I used it to help readers find the right solution or product for them by understanding the processes between various products based on their personal needs.

Becoming unhappy with my current situation, not knowing what I should study or what I should do as a career, I started to take tests to find out what study's program would suit me and my talents best, even though I still was enrolled in industrial engineering.
After a comprehensive test, I learned about the Liberal Arts and Sciences study program.
While German universities are nowadays mostly disciplinary, a liberal education serves the training of accomplished generalists. I experienced different types of multidisciplinary studies. Liberal Arts and Sciences provoked my broad interest by providing me an interdisciplinary education.

Throughout my studying years, I envisioned I had too many interests in different subjects. I questioned if I took the right path and if that was what I wanted to do in life. Looking back now, I'm proud of what I've done and what I've achieved. It helped me to know who I am and to become the person I am now. Rewarding me, with the knowledge I would not have acquired otherwise. Liberal Arts and Sciences seem to be the perfect fit for my future endeavors, as I am an individual that always has been curious and has been enchanted by the big questions about nature, our universe, our future, why, when and how; I think that Liberal Arts and Sciences is the best approach to tackle these questions.

Yours truly,
Julian Adam

  

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So, I improved my letter. I hope it's better now. I am applying for the Liberal Arts and Sciences program at the University College Maastricht/Venlo.

  • So, I improved my letter.
  • I hope it's better now.
  • I am applying for the Liberal Arts and Sciences program at the University College Maastricht/Venlo.
  • I understand the Liberal Arts and Science program as a process of intellectual discovery and an opportunity to continually challenge myself in an interdisciplinary, international learning community.
  • I graduated from the Isar-FOS Munich in July 2014, which is a specialized secondary school that focuses on economics.
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So, I improved my letter. I hope it's better now.

To whom it may concern
Dear Sir or Madam,

??I am applying for the Liberal Arts and Sciences program at the University College Maastricht/Venlo.
I understand the Liberal Arts and Science program as a process of intellectual discovery and an opportunity to continually challenge myself in an interdisciplinary, interna

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