Help with motivation letter for College

Hello
I would love some feedback on my motivation letter, it is required to be 800-1200 long, but i could only get this far 796

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Dear Sir/Madam,

With this letter I would like to explain my motives for applying to a Bachelors’ program with a public health specialization. I am currently a BSc student at the Technion, Israel, finishing up my studies in Biotechnology engineering. Born in Israel I have an Israeli passport, and with a Dutch mother I own a Dutch passport as well. Reaching the end of my studies at the Technion got me rethinking of the future I see for myself.

Growing up as a Christian Arab in a Jewish country has had its challenges, although going to an Arabic speaking school cushioned my childhood in some ways, though stepping into a Hebrew speaking academic institute for instance did take some getting used to, but I believe it helped strengthen my adapting abilities to new environments and, being part of the minority in the University has taught me to work harder and together with different people from different cultures. on the other hand, I must admit that being more related the European side of me and spending most summers of my childhood in the Netherlands, I have always seen myself studying abroad (specifically in the Netherlands) and most probably building my life there, in addition to Traveling and create an international career.

Since graduating High-school in 2006, I have had a vague idea of what I wanted to study. I considered studying medicine, nursing, medical lab, or veterinary for I have always leaned towards health oriented topics. Eventually, I decided to go for a BSc in Biotechnology engineering at the Technion Israel, thinking that getting “behind the scenes” of the medical world was an option worth trying, because the intense one-on-one role of a doctor or a nurse wasn’t what I wanted
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Now at the end of my degree I have reached a crossroad. I have the possibility of pursuing a Masters degree in Biotechnology and perhaps building a career vested in laboratories and research. However, it is not where I see myself. I have come to the conclusion that I would like to pursue a career which would provide me with more social interaction and one that would include a practical aspect as well. I had searched for an MA that might provide me with that aspect. Interested in the MA program Health and society or Nutrition and Health, I had finally found out that what had attracted me to it was the subject of public health. I had realized that after studying the molecular aspect of the human health, through molecular biotechnology and food chemistry and analysis, among other aspects of engineering processes, now I’m aiming for the bigger picture; moving from the single cell to the health of an entire community, monitoring and identifying health issues in the way it affects the life of a community as a whole, working on preventing diseases and promote health in countries with no access to much-needed medical intervention. Adding to that I am interested in the socio-environmental aspect as well, one that plays a big role in shaping the quality of life.

My current degree lacked sufficient background in social and human psychology courses therefore I broadened my search to BA programs that could provide me with such qualifications. Finding WHC as one of the better programs because of its English taught program as well as the full practical experience it offers making it easier to enter into the working field with a strong basis.

I will finish my current and last semester finals in March 2012, and in May I am planning to join a volunteering program in South Africa[add the name of the program]. While searching for volunteer programs, I became more certain of the nature of the work I want to do. I found many organizations operating in third world countries, many of which focus on health promotion, and I became interested in their long-term professional opportunities besides their periodic volunteering programs. I believe that the experience at[name of program] will prepare me for your public health program, and in turn, entering your program will provide me with the necessary practical means to work in such organizations. Furthermore, I believe that through your study program I would be able to direct future public health career to third world countries.
I expect that at WHC I will get the tools to tackle health issues that are currently encountering the health field internationally, strengthening my medical knowledge and developing managing skills that will help me get involved in healthcare organizations internationally. I intend to pursue a higher education where it is an MA or an MPH further along the path that I am planning to embark where WHC as my starting point.
Thank you for your time and consideration. I am eagerly awaiting you positive response.

Sincerely,"

i have a feeling its a little bit of a mess
i will be grateful for any help
Linda