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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
help with iambic pentameter!
I am writing a sonnet and I am not sure if i am on the right course for it. I would greatly appreciate help!!
A the flash of life was seen December night
B the truck was quickly lost from his control
A a rapid rainstorm made the truck take flight
B and through the barbed wire fence he soon would roll
C and heading right for death he would soon be;
D fear in eyes, with heart pounding in his chest
C off road towards the steady grounded tree
D at seventy miles, headed straight to west.
E the wreck then should have taken with it life
F but it was not the plan the Lord had yet
E and God held tight and spared his precious life
F and liberated anon from death’s debt
A the flash of life was seen December night
B the truck was quickly lost from his control
A a rapid rainstorm made the truck take flight
B and through the barbed wire fence he soon would roll
C and heading right for death he would soon be;
D fear in eyes, with heart pounding in his chest
C off road towards the steady grounded tree
D at seventy miles, headed straight to west.
E the wreck then should have taken with it life
F but it was not the plan the Lord had yet
E and God held tight and spared his precious life
F and liberated anon from death’s debt
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I have fixed a few feet below in bold, but the overall problem is that you have twisted the grammar structure too much in achieving the iambic pentameter. A good sonnet should be able to be laid out like a prose paragraph and have good sentence composition. A the flash of life was seen December night B the truck was quickly lost from his control A a rapid rainstorm made the truck take flight B and through the barbed wire fence he soon would roll C and heading right for death he soon would be; D fear in his eyes, heart pounding in his chest C off road towards the steady grounded tree D at sixty miles, he headed straight to west.
- I have fixed a few feet below in bold, but the overall problem is that you have twisted the grammar structure too much in achieving the iambic pentameter.
- A good sonnet should be able to be laid out like a prose paragraph and have good sentence composition.
- A the flash of life was seen December night B the truck was quickly lost from his control A a rapid rainstorm made the truck take flight B and through the barbed wire fence he soon would roll C and heading right for death he soon would be; D fear in his eyes, heart pounding in his chest C off road towards the steady grounded tree D at sixty miles, he headed straight to west.
- E the wreck then should have taken with it life F but it was not the plan the Lord had yet E and *** held tight and spared his precious life F and liberated him from his death debt
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I have fixed a few feet below in bold, but the overall problem is that you have twisted the grammar structure too much in achieving the iambic pentameter. A good sonnet should be able to be laid out like a prose paragraph and have good sentence composition.
A the flash of life was seen December night
B the truck was quickly lost from his control
A a rapid rainstorm made th
A the flash of life was seen December night
B the truck was quickly lost from his control
A a rapid rainstorm made th
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