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Anonymous Posted 15 years ago
Letter Writing
Help with Cover Letter
Hello everybody. I need some help with a cover letter. I already have some info down, but could you guys help me elaborate more on it? I feel like my body paragraph is missing something. I want to incoporate that I know my basic computer hardware stuff (ex. what a cpu is, what ram does, what kind of gpu is good etc.) and that I am more tech savy then your average joe since I do read alot of techblogs(gizmodo, engadget etc.) I also want to say something about video games(I play a decent amount a week and I am update on what games are coming out), since i want to do something with video games with comp. science degree. thanks in advance!
Dear Mr.X,
I am currently a high school student in grade 12 that is interested in your X intership program. The career councillor of my high school recommended me to apply for this internship as she noticed I am highly interested in technology and did fairly well in Mathematics.
I am currently learning basic Java programming in my spare time. Java seems to be a good place to start coding simple things. I consider my self an average mathematics student, which is clearly displayed on the application portion of the package. Next year I will be attending the Computing Science at university X. If I do get accepted into the internship program, it will give me a insight of what I can expect in my next few years of studies.
If you have any further questions or need more information, feel free to contact me via email at Email Removed or by telephone at (xxx)xxx-xxx. Thank you for reviewing and considering of my application for the X internship
Dear Mr.X,
I am currently a high school student in grade 12 that is interested in your X intership program. The career councillor of my high school recommended me to apply for this internship as she noticed I am highly interested in technology and did fairly well in Mathematics.
I am currently learning basic Java programming in my spare time. Java seems to be a good place to start coding simple things. I consider my self an average mathematics student, which is clearly displayed on the application portion of the package. Next year I will be attending the Computing Science at university X. If I do get accepted into the internship program, it will give me a insight of what I can expect in my next few years of studies.
If you have any further questions or need more information, feel free to contact me via email at Email Removed or by telephone at (xxx)xxx-xxx. Thank you for reviewing and considering of my application for the X internship
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Let me begin with some basic spelling suggestions: * in sentence 1, you are interested in an "internship" (it's also preferable to use "who" rather than "that" when referring to a person) * in sentence 2, it was the career "counselor" ; "when" she noticed ... * in the second paragraph, you will either be attending "the Computing Science class", or you will be attending "Computing Science" (no "the") * and you will be getting "an insight" into the future Now, as to your additional information: you might try something like this ... "I am very interested in computer programming and I'm looking forward to a future in that field.
- Let me begin with some basic spelling suggestions: * in sentence 1, you are interested in an "internship" (it's also preferable to use "who" rather than "that" when referring to a person) * in sentence 2, it was the career "counselor" ; "when" she noticed ...
- * in the second paragraph, you will either be attending "the Computing Science class", or you will be attending "Computing Science" (no "the") * and you will be getting "an insight" into the future Now, as to your additional information: you might try something like this ...
- "I am very interested in computer programming and I'm looking forward to a future in that field.
- My goal is to have a career in developing video games.
- To that end, I have already developed a considerable amount of knowledge about both computer hardware design and program writing.
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Let me begin with some basic spelling suggestions:
* in sentence 1, you are interested in an "internship" (it's also preferable to use "who" rather than "that" when referring to a person)
* in sentence 2, it was the career "counselor" ; "when" she noticed ...
* in the second paragraph, you will either be attending "the Computing Science class", or you will be attending "Compu
* in sentence 1, you are interested in an "internship" (it's also preferable to use "who" rather than "that" when referring to a person)
* in sentence 2, it was the career "counselor" ; "when" she noticed ...
* in the second paragraph, you will either be attending "the Computing Science class", or you will be attending "Compu
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