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P3t3r1 Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Help with another short paragraph

0 00Hello, I am wondering if I could get another quick grammar editing with this short little paragraph. Thanks alot. 02br
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00People who are well fed and educated are just as self-centered as those who suffer in poverty and lack proper education. The society in 01u00The Winner02u00 is relatively crude. People live in mud huts, plant their own food, and receive a simple education compared to the West. 01u00The Shinning Houses02u00 evolves around a different part of the spectrum. 00 00The inhabitants live in a section of the western society that does not “[make] their living by physical work (67)”. They are mostly white-collars that are not too terribly wealthy but fare better than most and have high expectations. Yet, people in this middle-class, westernized society are just as selfish as those that live in 00. In 010200, busloads of relatives came to visit Pius, the elderly lottery winner, not because they want to “congratulate” him on his win but because they want to “[clamour] for his attention (98)” and see the “telegram that announced [his] win (99)”. Everyone is concerned about where the money is going and cares little about Pius.00 0-
  

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0 01blockquote 01cite 10P3t3r112cite 10Hello, I am wondering if I could get another quick grammar editing with this short little paragraph. Thanks alot. 12br 12br 10People who are wel11font 10l-f12font 10ed and educated are just as self-centered as those who suffer in poverty and lack proper education.

  • 0 01blockquote 01cite 10P3t3r112cite 10Hello, I am wondering if I could get another quick grammar editing with this short little paragraph.
  • Thanks alot.
  • 12br 12br 10People who are wel11font 10l-f12font 10ed and educated are just as self-centered as those who suffer in poverty and lack proper education.
  • The society in 11u 10The Winner12u 10 is relatively crude.
  • People live in mud huts, plant their own food, and receive a simple education compared to the West.
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01cite10P3t3r112cite10Hello, I am wondering if I could get another quick grammar editing with this short little paragraph. Thanks alot. 12br
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10People who are wel11font10l-f12font10ed and educated are just as self-centered as those who suffer in poverty and lack proper
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0 Thanks again for the quick reply!0-

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