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Clwguy Posted 7 years ago
Letter Writing

Help with an awkward sentence

I am having trouble coming up with a better alternative to the following sentence. The purpose of the letter is to request information. To me, "what is happening" sounds amateurish in a business letter. Thanks in advance!


I would like a full update, including what is happening with the property, the stock, and whether any monies have been received.

  

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I'm not sure I understand what you're trying to say. Who are you writing this to? Can you provide more context?

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  • Who are you writing this to?
  • Can you provide more context?
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I'm not sure I understand what you're trying to say. Who are you writing this to? Can you provide more context?

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ClwguyI would like a full update, including what is happening with on the status of the property, the stock, and whether any monies have been received.

Try that.

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