help with a application letter

im applying to a university as a mature student and i need some help correcting my letter.

Please consider my application for the Sociology degree program at for the academic year 2008.



After graduating high school I enrolled in the Office/Legal Administration program at . Soon after my first semester of studies, I felt as if I had rushed into a post-secondary education without any real thought or direction. Being such a recent graduate from high school, I wasn’t entirely sure of what I wanted to do and ended up picking a program that I thought was beneficial towards my unclear career goals at the time. As a result I found myself unmotivated to excel in my academics and did not face my education with the maturity and drive that I should have, thus resulting in overall poor marks. Despite my indecisiveness I still intended to complete the program. I completed my first year of Office Administration but then struggled with finishing the Legal portion of it due to a failure that kept me behind for a few years. Being so behind in my program and only having 2 classes a week made me take 2 extra-curricular courses to bring my status back to full-time. Quickly after taking these 2 additional courses I landed a full-time job at the ********* and instead of withdrawing from the courses I irrationally stopped going resulting in an awfully low mark of zero. After receiving my Office Administration certificate, I set off on a journey of work, travel, and hopes of discovering my ambition.



In 2005 I was ready for an experience of a life-time and decided to travel throughout for 3 months. My best friend and I first flew out to for the first month to visit family and friends. My cousins in then joined us in our journeys and we were off to , , , , , , and . by far was one of the best experiences thus far in my life. I felt as we traveled around the many countries everyone had so much to offer. I was fascinated by the different cultures and organizational structures around the world and how the way of life in some of the countries was such a contrast to . Reading back in my travel journal I realized that I really wrote a lot focusing on (not finished with this part yet)…………….After my trip I was still very interested in and stimulated by the different societies around the world, something I would have never thought about if it wasn’t for this trip. Since my trip I have been reading a lot of books on culture & society as well as travelling as much as possible to places throughout the and . My aspiration ever since has been to pursue a University Degree in Sociology and ********** offers this degree part-time which is essential to my schedule. Enthusiastic to apply right away, I didn’t want to rush into it like I did with college and so I decided to work full-time and save up while reading and learning more about sociology on my own.



In 2006 I landed a job as a clinic receptionist at a local clinic. As I gained experience and shed my college education as a receptionist, I shined in exceeding all expectations at this clinic. After 3 months working there I was quickly given new and exciting tasks within the office. I was making newsletters, coming up with marketing ploys, planning interoffice events, maintaining the website, and overall helping the newly opened clinic immensely in areas they weren’t specialized in. Unfortunately the clinic wasn’t providing me with sufficient working hours and so I began working as an administrative assistant at the ***********. From working in an office environment for the past few years now, I have come to value the benefits of a post secondary education more from getting a grasp of what it means in the real world. I have also become more suited to working longer and harder and having higher standards for the work I do than I had previously. I am always exceeding expectations and constantly challenging myself. For this attitude I was elected to be the Social Club President by Human Resources and employees, an undertaking that involves throwing monthly events for all employees that donate to this club, including the Christmas Party, after-work social events, monthly luncheons and many more. Outside of my administrative duties I am also an active volunteer at all fundraising events that the college holds as well as an interviewer during the admissions process. In addition to my full-time employment I write complimentary music album reviews for a friend’s e-zine, practice yoga 4 times a week, and spend valuable time with family and friends. From working both a full-time job and having extra curricular activities I have become adjusted to working long hours and putting in the extra time to make sure that the work I do Is as good as it can be done with my capabilities.



From working in the administration field and travelling I have come to appreciate the value of education more than I had in the past. It is from this appreciation that I have made the decision to enrol in university and gain access to the education that I feel I need and want for my future career goals in life. Having grown tremendously on a personal level since my departure from college I can say to myself now, that it is time for me to commit to an education that will help shape my future, I am now ready to tackle my studies with a clear site on the goals that education offers. Access to jobs in the field of which I choose, respect from my peers, and most importantly, a feeling of personal accomplishment that comes from putting in the work and seeing the rewards of my work. I hope this letter will be sufficient in answering the questions that have been required of me to answer. I look forward to possibly entering the next chapter of my life, and I hope can be a part of that.