Help to improve a sentence
Hi guys,
I'm practicing writing and I had to write an essay about relaxation. I have got a feedback on my piece of writing and I should improve this sentence "When people meditate regularly, they become healthier and happier. ", but I can't find a way to improve it. Could you please help me?
Thanks a lot,
Tamy
Top answer
Tam Íris When people meditate regularly, they become healthier and happier. I don't know whether rephrasing would create any improvement, but there are other ways to say it. These come to mind.
- Tam Íris When people meditate regularly, they become healthier and happier.
- I don't know whether rephrasing would create any improvement, but there are other ways to say it.
- These come to mind.
- Regular meditation promotes health and happiness.
- Meditation benefits both the body and the mind if practiced regularly.
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Tam ÍrisWhen people meditate regularly, they become healthier and happier.
I don't know whether rephrasing would create any improvement, but there are other ways to say it. These come to mind.
Regular meditation promotes health and happiness.
Meditation benefits both the body and the mind if practiced regularly.
It may dep
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