help! please... :( personal statement!

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00i'm just working on applications for universities and i'm starting to feel desperate with all those motivation letters and stuff...02br
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00Honestly, I still did not know exactly what I wanted to study, when I was almost done with school. On one hand I was interested in the regular German program of00 00Business Studies (BWL) but on the other hand this idea also did not convince me a hundred percent.02br
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00For that reason I decided to go abroad to gain some international experiences and to develop my personality. That way, I realized how important it is for me, to learn about other cultures, their countries and to be able to communicate, without difficulties, in other languages. As a part of the Aupair-Program where you live and work in an American family environment, you also get to meet and make friends with people from other contries all over the world. I can proudly admit, that those 13 months in the US did not only help me to improve my English language skills a lot, but rather to broaden my horizon in so many ways and to build up my personality and self-confidence. 02br
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00During this time I also did a lot of research concerning the different study courses and I was immediately convinced by the program “International Business”, that combines Business Studies with an international aspect.02br
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00For the fact that being able to speak more than one foreign language fluently is one of my long-lasting aims, I organized a stay abroad in Spain for a total of more than 3 months. In this time I also attended an intensive course in a Spanish Academy and managed to finish this course with 92% in a B1+-level-test. To learn even more about the language, the culture and country I will be going to Spain again in the end of May 2008, for a period of at least 5 weeks.02br
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00I want to study International Business because I do not want to limit my studies to the German economic area but to prepare myself for the international market, to learn and understand economics but to also become a part of it. The chance to study in classes only up to 50 people where the course instructions are a 100% in English, is a big motivation for me and I am looking forward to give proof of my ambition, willingness to perform, learning aptitude and team spirit. 010id5