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High school and college curriculums have few similarities and differences. One similarity is that both curriculums have requirements and electives. Another similarity is both curriculums emphasize math, literature, history, science, and writing skills. The curriculums also have some differences. One difference between the two curriculums is the classes. High school classes such as English, Math, and Science prepare one for college level classes. Another difference is the credit hours needed to graduate. For example, when I was in high school in order to graduate one must have twenty three credit hours. One the other hand, one must have one hundred credit hours to graduate from college.

BarbaraPA · Accepted Answer

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danielrams07High school and college curriculums have few similarities and differences. One similarity is that both curriculums have requirements and electives. Another similarity is both curriculums emphasize math, literature, history, science, and writing skills. The curriculums also have some differences. One difference between the two curriculums is the classes. High school classes such as English, Math, and Science prepare one for college level classes. Another difference is the credit hours needed to graduate. For example, when I was in high school in order to graduate one must have twenty three credit hours. One the other hand, one must have one hundred credit hours to graduate from college.

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1) See if you can find a way to write so that you don't repeat your phrases so much, an in particlar the number of times the word "curriculums" is used.

2) I don't really understand the point you are trying to make with "High school classes such as English, Math, and Science prepare one for college level classes." Can you state that again in another way?

3) Don't capitalize the names of the subject.

4) Since both high school and college are four years, the difference in the number of credits needs to be explained. Each course in HS is one credit and each in college is usually 3 (sometimes more and sometimes less). That's not as large a difference as you make it appear to be.

There are bigger differences between HS and college than what you have highlighed. Spend a few moments thinking about them. You can improve the second half of this paragraph a great deal.

danielrams07High school and college curriculums have few similarities and differences. One similarity is that both curriculums have requirements and electives. Another similarity is both curriculums emphasize math, literature, history, science, and writing skills. The curriculums also have some differences. One difference between the two curriculums is the classes. High school classes such as English, Math, and Science prepare one for college level classes. Another difference is the credit hours needed to graduate. For example, when I was in high school in order to graduate one must have twenty three credit hours. One the other hand, one must have one hundred credit hours to graduate from college.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Grammar GeekThere are bigger differences between HS and college than what you have highlighted.

Grammar Geek has made some excellent suggestions.
Here is a suggestion to help you think about the larger differences.

First, get a published booklet of your college's curriculum (sometimes this is published on line) and browse through it. Look at the numbers and descriptions of the courses offered. Then think of the curriculum that your high school offered.

Next, imagine that you have the job of establishing a university, named Danielram University. How would you decide on the curriculum in your school? How do high schools make decisions on their curriculums?

BarbaraPA · Answer

Daniel, I'm sorry to see that this excellent post by A Stars came hours and hours before the PM you sent to me assuring me you had spent the entire day thinking and couldn't come up with a single thing.

Please read through her post again.

Surely you can come up with some differences. You need to try to do this yourself.

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