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Bbser Posted 15 years ago
Vocabulary

Help people related to cancer live a better life

I would like to join your great team by working as an analyst and make my own contributions to help people related to cancer live a better life.

Could you help me polish this sentence?



Thanks a lot for your time.



BBSER
  

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I would like to join your inspirin g team as an analyst and contribute to your efforts to help cancer patients and their families live better lives.

— Mister Micawber

  • I would like to join your inspirin g team as an analyst and contribute to your efforts to help cancer patients and their families live better lives.
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I would like to join your inspiring team as an analyst and contribute to your efforts to help cancer patients and their families live better lives.
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Wow, I love your sentence, Mister. Thank you so much.

In addition, I do have a concern with the red part.

I was thinking to change it to something like: ... your efforts to provide high quality of cancer care.

Does this sounds normal or better?
Mister MicawberI would like to join your inspiring team as an analyst and contribute to your efforts
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...your efforts to provide high quality cancer care.

That's OK, too.
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Yes, that's what I would like to say. Thank you very much!
Mister Micawber...your efforts to provide high quality cancer care. That's OK, too.
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