Help On Sentence Modeling!!!

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0Hi everyone, i appreciate all the feedback i have been getting thus far and am having trouble on an assingment coming up with some modeled sentences and am asking for your help! Note: these sentences contain absolute phrases thus require absolute constructions in the modeled version.02br02br00Example - The man stood laughing, his weapon at his hips.02br02br00I Modeled this into - The woman sat smoking, a black poodle in her lap.02br02br00I have two more sentences, which are much longer that i am having trouble coming up with modeled versions, so any help would be awesome!!02br02br01b001. In the pouring rain, following a muddy, almost invisible path, i finally arrived at the station, my shoes leaving puddles with every step, my clothes and satchel waterlogged.02b02br02br01b00Modeled version: ???02b02br02br01b002. With a breathy shriek the train pulled away, the crowd cheering, waving at the caboose until it was out of sight.02b02br02br01b00Modeled version: ???02b02br02br00Like i said, i'm just having a brain lapse and can't come up with modeled versions, and the ones i do come up with sound rediculous! Thanks for your help!0-

Clive · Accepted Answer

0Hi Matt,02br
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00Welcome to the Forum.02br
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01font00Note: these sentences contain absolute phrases thus require absolute constructions in the modeled version.02font00 I'm not sure exactly what you mean by 'an absolute phrase'. I guess you mean, just try to copy all the structures?02br
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01font00Example - The man stood laughing, his weapon at his hips.02font02br
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01font00I Modeled this into - The woman sat smoking, a black poodle in her lap.02font02br
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01b01font001. In the pouring rain, following a muddy, almost invisible path, i finally arrived at the station, my shoes leaving puddles with every step, my clothes and satchel waterlogged.02font02b02br
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01b01font00Modeled version: ??? 02font00In the dark house, climbing the unseen stairs, she soon reached her lover's door, her heart beating with anticipation, her mind filled with thoughts of passion.02b02br
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01b01font002. With a breathy shriek the train pulled away, the crowd cheering, waving at the caboose until it was out of sight.02font02b02br
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01b01font00Modeled version: ???02font00 With a deafening roar, the space shuttle soared high into the sky, the astronauts bracing themselves, staring at the view on their screens until it became the blackness of space.02b02br
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01b00Best wishes, Clive 02b0-

Matt0915 · Answer

0Clive,02br
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00thank you for giving me some examples for the modeled version, i really appreciate it! Plus thank you for welcoming me to the forum!02br
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00Best,02br
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00Matt0-

CalifJim · Answer

0 I'm not sure how closely you are expected to follow the model, but here goes:02br
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01i00In the dappled half-light, following a mysterious, hidden trail, the horseman finally reached the grotto, his heart pounding at every turn, his jaw set firm.02br
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00 With an intent gaze the robber slowly edged out of the bank, the customers shrinking back, holding their breath until he left the building.02i02br
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00 CJ0-

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