Help needed with motivation letter to university

Hello! Could anyone take a look at my motivational letter for university. I tried not to just lay down the facts but to speak from my heart, why I want to be accepted for this course. But maybe it's too blah blah blah and not formal enough? ANY suggestions (grammar, contents) are welcome.





Dear Sir or Madam:

I would like to apply to the course of Xxx for the 2010/11 academic year. I’m interested in participating this course because later on I want to study Nutrition and Dietetics at university and I want to improve my academic qualification and also accustom myself to school-life in England. The reason why I chose X University of London was that I got great recommendations about your course from several universities.

I have chosen to study in England because yet it is not possible to study Nutrition and Dietetics in Estonia and I think that receiving my education in an international language gives me great advantages in the labour market later on. Also I know that England’s educational system is greatly valued all over the world.

I am from Estonia but right now I am living in Italy. I went to university right after high school and I received Bachelor’s Degree in Political Science in X University in year X. I do think that it was a great experience, I learnt a lot and developed as a person. But I still felt that I do not see myself working in a government institution after five or ten years. I found my first job in a small private sector office which was dealing with customs documentation and statistical reports for Statistics Estonia. After one year I was promoted to be the leader of the second department. I kept working there for another three years and though I really enjoyed my job I found that it is not offering me any new challenges and self-expression that I was seeking for. This was when I decided to take a time-off and to go to live in different environment, in hopes that it would help me understand what I’m really interested in and what I want to do in my life.

I have always tried to be conscious about what I’m eating and how food affects my body. When I found myself reading one book about food, nutrition and health after another, I realized that this is what I should be studying in order to align my work and interests. I do think that right nutrition would keep humans from most of their health troubles and I am very keen to study this so I could be a help to myself, my close ones and also other people in general. In today’s world of continuously growing amount of overweighed people speciality of nutrition and dietetics’ importance increases every day.

I think that I should be accepted to this course, because I have a great interest towards this field and therefore I’m willing to put a lot of effort in my studies. I am very helpful person by nature and also active and good communicator and therefore I see myself in a job tightly related to helping people. After finishing my studies I want to start working in this speciality and also continue studying to receive Masters’ Degree.

Thank you very much for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response. Should you have any questions feel free to contact me via telephone (number) or e-mail at (mail).

Yours sincerely,



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