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Goodness Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
help needed with introduction
hi everyone
i'm writing essay abot allowing people to have a gun and this is the introducton and the thesis .
i want to make sure thers is no mistake .
introduction
the issue of ban on civilian gun ownership has been discussed for a long time. this issue is directly relevant to the security of the socity.
thesis
allwoing people having a gun is one of the worst laws for many reasonsuch as : increase the rate of death , providing a black market for the guns dealers and weaking the role of police
& are these sentences correct
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the number of people killed by guns in south africa has steadily increased each year. Police reasoned that for smuggler illegal guns
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they haven't been trained by specialists
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The importance of the country exceeds that of individual advantage
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Second,all gun sales start with a legal purchase . gradually ,guns sales will be diverted into illegal market which gives the buyer many advantages like : no matter what the age is
thank you in advance
i'm writing essay abot allowing people to have a gun and this is the introducton and the thesis .
i want to make sure thers is no mistake .
introduction
the issue of ban on civilian gun ownership has been discussed for a long time. this issue is directly relevant to the security of the socity.
thesis
allwoing people having a gun is one of the worst laws for many reasonsuch as : increase the rate of death , providing a black market for the guns dealers and weaking the role of police
& are these sentences correct
1 -
the number of people killed by guns in south africa has steadily increased each year. Police reasoned that for smuggler illegal guns
2 -
they haven't been trained by specialists
3-
The importance of the country exceeds that of individual advantage
4-
Second,all gun sales start with a legal purchase . gradually ,guns sales will be diverted into illegal market which gives the buyer many advantages like : no matter what the age is
thank you in advance
Top answer
Firstly, make sure you use a capital letter at the start of all sentences and for proper nouns such as South Africa. Check your spellings, you have many errors. I have amended other errors in red.
- Firstly, make sure you use a capital letter at the start of all sentences and for proper nouns such as South Africa.
- Check your spellings, you have many errors.
- I have amended other errors in red.
- the issue of a ban on civilian gun ownership has been discussed for a long time.
- this issue is directly relevant to the security of the socity.
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Firstly, make sure you use a capital letter at the start of all sentences and for proper nouns such as South Africa. Check your spellings, you have many errors. I have amended other errors in red.
the issue of a ban on civilian gun ownership has been discussed for a long time. this issue is directly relevant to the security of the socity.
allwoing peo
the issue of a ban on civilian gun ownership has been discussed for a long time. this issue is directly relevant to the security of the socity.
allwoing peo
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