Help needed on grammar..thanks in advance

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Hi everyone,My name is Amad and I'm a newbie in this forum. I'm still learning the  English language,so I would need your kind assistance to check my  grammar. Basically I want to post a story at at our office bulletin  board, which regards to incident which was happened to me few weeks ago.Below is the story. Appreciate if you can help me to check my grammar.Many Thanks-----This incident is actually happen to my friend  whom accompanied me for supper and I only found out about it after the  incident had happened. That night after having a late supper, my friend  and I walked to side of the road where we parked our cars. I noticed  that my friend was busy looking at his cell phone while walking to his  car. I reached to my car first so I leave the place earlier than him.  Little did I know that after I left, my friend has been robbed before he  enters his car. He said he was standing in front of his car for awhile  to read a sms when suddenly a motorcyclist stopped beside him to ask for  a favor. While he was about to respond to them, within a split second  the only thing he knew a knife was put at his neck. The robbers quickly  took his wallet together with his cell phone and sped off.Luckily he is not injured and his car is safe. He  immediately went to nearby police station to report the incident.------

Terryxpress · Accepted Answer

My name is Amad and I'm a newbie in this forum. I'm still learning ~~the~~ English ~~language~~, so I ~~would~~ need your kind assistance ~~to check~~ in checking***my grammar. Basically, (note comma) I want to post a story ~~at at~~ on our office bulletin board, ~~which~~ with ~~regards~~ regard to an incident which ~~was~~ happened to me a few weeks ago.
Below is the story. Appreciate if you can help me to check my grammar.
(Understand that this is a very colloquial way of saying, " I would appreciate it if you could help me..."
I suggest you write, "Appreciate it if you could..."

This incident is actually happened to my a friend ~~whom~~ who accompanied me ~~for~~ at supper (better: "whom I had supper with.")

and I only found out about it after the incident had happened.

(This is very odd: how could you have found out about it before it happened? You might say something like, "and I only found out about it recently/this morning.")

That night after having a late supper,

(This is odd: you are repeating this idea that you had supper, and adding that it was a late supper. Is that sentence necessary?)

Better to write:

After supper, my friend and I walked to ~~side of the road~~

You are being too specific. Most cars ARE parked at the roadside!

Better: ...and I walker to where we had parked our cars. I noticed that my friend was busy looking at his cell phone ~~while walking to his car~~ as we walked. I reached to my car first ~~so I leave the place earlier than him~~ so I drove off before him. Little did I know that after I left, my friend ~~has been~~ was robbed before he ~~enters~~ reached his car. He ~~said~~ told me he was standing in front of his car for ~~awhile~~ a while to read a sms, when suddenly a motorcyclist stopped beside him to ask ~~for~~ a favor. ~~While~~ Just as he was about to respond to them, within a split second, ~~the only thing he knew~~ a knife was ~~put~~ at his ~~neck~~ throat. The robbers quickly took his wallet together with and his cell phone, and sped off.
Luckily, he is was not injured and his car ~~is safe~~ wasn't touched. He immediately went to a nearby police station to report the incident.

***When we are speaking generally = a rule of thumb, we would use 'to check"

After you have written an essay, it is important to check for errors in grammar and punctuation.

You are referring to a specific instance, where you are asking for assistance to check this particular piece of writing, so- 'in checking'.

Note the corrections to punctuation - I've put in necessary commas.

Terryxpress · Answer

SOMETHING WENT TERRIBLY WRONG. I MADE CORRECTIONS, BUT THEY HAVE NOT APPEARED...AND AS YET, I CAN'T FIND AN EDIT BUTTON TO GO BACK AND MAKE CORRECTIONS.
THIS IS HOW IT SHOULD BE:
My name is Amad and I'm a newbie in this forum. I'm still learning English, so I ~~would~~ need your kind assistance to check my *** grammar. Basically, (note comma) I want to post a story ~~at at~~ on our office bulletin board, ~~which~~ with ~~regards~~ regard to an incident which ~~was~~ happened to me a few weeks ago.
Below is the story. Appreciate if you can help me to check my grammar.
(Understand that this is a very colloquial way of saying, " I would appreciate it if you could help me..."
I suggest you write, "Appreciate it if you could..."

This incident is actually happened to my a friend whom who accompanied me ~~for~~ at supper (better: "whom I had supper with.")

and I only found out about it after the incident had happened.

(This is very odd: how could you have found out about it before it happened? You might say something like, "and I only found out about it recently/this morning.")

That night after having a late supper,

(This is odd: you are repeating the idea that you had supper, and adding that it was a late supper. Is that sentence necessary?)

Better to write:

After supper, my friend and I walked to side of the road

You are being too specific. Most cars ARE parked at the roadside!

Better: ...and we walked to where we had parked our cars. I noticed that my friend was busy looking at his cell phone ~~while walking to his car~~ as we walked. I reached to my car first ~~so I leave the place earlier than him~~ so I drove off before him. Little did I know that after I left, my friend ~~has been~~ was robbed before he ~~enters~~ reached his car. He ~~said~~ told me he was standing in front of his car for ~~awhile~~ a while to read a an sms, when suddenly a motorcyclist stopped beside him to ask for a favour. ~~While~~ Just as he was about to respond to them, within a split second, ~~the only thing he knew~~ a knife was put at his ~~neck~~ throat. The robbers quickly took his wallet together with and his cell phone, and sped off.
Luckily, he is was not injured and his car is safe wasn't touched. He immediately went to a nearby police station to report the incident.

***When we are speaking generally = a rule of thumb, we would use 'to check"

After you have written an essay, it is important to check for errors in grammar and punctuation.

You are referring to a specific instance, where you are asking for assistance to check this particular piece of writing, as here, then- 'in checking'.

Note the corrections to punctuation - I've put in necessary commas.

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Terryxpress · Answer

I give up. The word processor here is very limited, and now is playing up: what you write is NOT what you get.

Terryxpress · Answer

afb: I tried to use the word processor 'strike through' to put a line through incorrect words, and then write in the correct word/s. That hasn't happened!

At least let me have another go at correcting:
I'm still learning the English language,

should be:

I'm still learning English,...

Help needed on grammar..thanks in advance

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