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Nghia ngo Posted 9 years ago
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The bar chart illustrates the workload done by married men and women at home every week in the three types family.

A glance at the chart, it is clear that the hours of housework done by women escalated significantly between the family which is without children and have more than three kids. By contrast, the men spent less time than women doing the housework.

At the beginning, in the family without children, the women spent 30 hours per week to do housewifery and they used more time to take care of their family if they have more children. Indeed, in the family have 1, 2 or more kids, the hours of housework done by wives were about 50 and nearly 60 hours respectively.

On the other hand, the time is spent to do the chore by men, which is always lower than women. In the family without kid, the husbands spent nearly 20 hours to do housework that was a half lower than women. Moreover, in the family have more than 3 kids, the trend of the men intended to do housework diminished and reached at 15 hours meanwhile the women did four times as many hours as their husbands.

  

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I have highlighted the problem text, and given some corrections. You have trouble with sentence structure, especially sentences with relative clauses. The bar chart illustrates the workload hours of work done by married men and women at home every week in the three types of families.

  • I have highlighted the problem text, and given some corrections.
  • You have trouble with sentence structure, especially sentences with relative clauses.
  • The bar chart illustrates the workload hours of work done by married men and women at home every week in the three types of families.
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  • ) A glance at the chart, (Not grammatical) it is clear that the hours of housework done by women escalated significantly between the family which is without children and have more than three kids.
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I have highlighted the problem text, and given some corrections. You have trouble with sentence structure, especially sentences with relative clauses.



The bar chart illustrates the workload hours of work done by married men and women at home every week in the three types of familie

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