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Dawnyingli Posted 14 years ago
Science & IT

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The following is an article to introduce a new product of a high heel. I am not sure if my English is appropriate or not.Thank you for everybody's comment!NM two-tone color double deck heel liftIn conform to the trend and the development of science and technology in the forefront, with experience for more than ten years on subject of shoes material products in-depth study and discussion, we research and developed a new physical material product—C-PUR (nanometer two-tone color double deck heel lift). This products use a modern nanotechnology, made by first-class equipment and superb craftsmanship to create a brand new, particular nm heel lift for high-heels in shoe manufacture industry.The product of C-PUR nm heel lift has been dozens of patented technology in the country. It uses a unique two-tone color appearance in heel lift which is a part of patent, not only beautiful but also hard wearing. In addition, after extensive research and further observation and modification, we discovered that a unique nail has a stronger snap-in force and torsional force than ordinary pieces hence it is more efficiently to prevent dropping between heel lift and the piece.Base on the superior characteristics of the nanomaterial which are high strength, high diffusivity, high plasticity, and high toughness, compared with the traditional TPU heel lift, C-PUR nm two-tone color double deck has a preeminent review on the quality improvements, evident in more wearable, more portable, easier antiskid and more muffler, it has a significant fundamental change of sublimation especially in the wear-resistance.Since the Company introduced the polyurethane carved heel lift in 2006, through a lot of practice and summary of research and development of the second generation nm two-tone color double deck wearable heel lift, it fundamentally changed the carved heel lift when a flaw will produced during carving due to the tool of engraving, and the two-color dual-hardness also eliminate the harsh noise when a friction is against the heel lift and the ground.By jointing research and development with high-tech institute to develop nm adding materials, we successfully obtained a key technological breakthrough which is wear-resistance of heel lift! And this can make our products more wearable and more shock absorption!Nano two-tone color double deck wearable heel lift, the Company currently has received dozens of national patents and intellectual property rights, at the same time when facing customers or industry the Company launched a series of investment strategy in conformance with the spirit of mutual-win and mutual reciprocity, and also favorable to counterparts to provide a full range of patent licensing, patent equipment, raw materials, production technology and other support!
  

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Uh, a nanometer, one-billionth part of a meter? With two different colors? How can that be when the wavelength of visible light (300-750 nm) is much greater than its dimensions?

  • Uh, a nanometer, one-billionth part of a meter?
  • With two different colors?
  • How can that be when the wavelength of visible light (300-750 nm) is much greater than its dimensions?
  • As to the rest of it, I cannot comment because I can't make much sense of it.
  • If you write in logical and short sentences, then it will be much better.
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Uh, a nanometer, one-billionth part of a meter? With two different colors? How can that be when the wavelength of visible light (300-750 nm) is much greater than its dimensions?

As to the rest of it, I cannot comment because I can't make much sense of it.
If you write in logical and short sentences, then it will be much better.
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Yes, the one-billionth part of a meter. Actually I'm not sure how can that be either, i just translated this by a script in Chinses as my father's request. I'm not familiar with technology field so writing this article is quite difficult for me. Maybe I should suggest my father to hire a translator . haha.Never mind, thanks for your advice anyway!
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I don't think that the problem is the translation - the problems are rooted in the original text.
It really needs to be much clearer so that business people can understand it. Otherwise, they will not understand the product and its merits.
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Thanks for the advice. I should let my father consider that. Thank you !

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