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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
Grammar
Help me with my essay, please!!!
Hi,
I'd really appreciate if someone could give me some comments on my short essay... Thank you in advance. Only to see if it is written correctly (grammar) and that I use the right words.
"Many people believe that using cellphones at school should be limited. I agree that using cellphones should be limited for several reasons.
Firstly, when students use their cellphone they are less concentrated. For example, when students use their cellphone during the lesson, they don’t listen to the teacher. Moreover, it causes low grades since they don’t understand the material.
Secondly, using cellphone at school can impair both student-teacher and between-students’ communication. For example, during the break most of the students prefer to play cellphone games instead of talking with their friends.
In conclusion, I think that using cellphones should be limited at school because it is harmful for the students both during the lesson and during the break."
I'd really appreciate if someone could give me some comments on my short essay... Thank you in advance. Only to see if it is written correctly (grammar) and that I use the right words.
"Many people believe that using cellphones at school should be limited. I agree that using cellphones should be limited for several reasons.
Firstly, when students use their cellphone they are less concentrated. For example, when students use their cellphone during the lesson, they don’t listen to the teacher. Moreover, it causes low grades since they don’t understand the material.
Secondly, using cellphone at school can impair both student-teacher and between-students’ communication. For example, during the break most of the students prefer to play cellphone games instead of talking with their friends.
In conclusion, I think that using cellphones should be limited at school because it is harmful for the students both during the lesson and during the break."
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I have highlighted in yellow some words that you need to reconsider. "Many people believe that using cellphones at school should be limited. I agree that using cellphones should be limited for several reasons.
- I have highlighted in yellow some words that you need to reconsider.
- "Many people believe that using cellphones at school should be limited.
- I agree that using cellphones should be limited for several reasons.
- Firstly, when students use their cellphone they are less concentrated .
- ) , they don’t listen to the teacher.
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I have highlighted in yellow some words that you need to reconsider.
"Many people believe that using cellphones at school should be limited. I agree that using cellphones should be limited for several reasons.
Firstly, when students use their cellphone they are less concentrated. For example, when students use their cellphone during
"Many people believe that using cellphones at school should be limited. I agree that using cellphones should be limited for several reasons.
Firstly, when students use their cellphone they are less concentrated. For example, when students use their cellphone during
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Thank you a lot... So, it is okay to use the following phrases: "impair communication" and "cause low grades"?
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Anonymous "impair communication"Good.
Anonymous "cause low grades"?Not really.
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