Help me with motivational letter, please!

Here is my letter. could you help me to edit it?

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you in order to apply for the Master’s Degree study program in Business Management and Corporate Finance in which I am particularly interested.

My aim is to obtain deeper knowledge of operation of business, for to become a high class specialist in an international consulting group. I am inclined to believe that a university with a worldwide reputation like The University of Finance and Management is agreeable to the standards of my future career objectives.

I hold a 4 year bachelor’s degree in Business Informational Technologies of The National Research University ITMO. I have done thesis on the principals of the organization of information flows as motivational factor of improving the productivity of a trade network top management. In addition to that I posses sufficient linguistic skills, which can be acknowledged by the results of my TOEFL IBT. From April`10 to August`10 I had a full time job in Saint-Petersburg telecommunication company “IT-kub”, as junior project manager, where I gained sound knowledge of negotiations for the sale and design traceability. As a result, this strengthened my leadership and socializing skills.

The ambitions which I have just exposed to you would not be adequate without a solid theoretical background and a long term academic experience. As far as I am concerned, the Master's degree study program provided by The University of Finance and Management would be an impeccable option of continuing my higher education. Furthermore, the courses this program combines match perfectly my professional projects and academic expectations.

I would like to thank you for considering my application. I am willing to provide you with any further information, should it be required.

Yours faithfully,

Dmitriy Ivashkin