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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Letter Writing
Help me with coverletter please.
this is my coverletter.
are there any errors?
Please help me out.
Please accept this letter in application for a position within your company.
As you can see in the enclosed resume, I have great customer service skills with approximately 5 years experience in the customer service industries.
I have enthusiasm and passion for coffee. I have learned about coffee and a bit of latte art at a coffee school right before I came to Canada. I like to see people happy with my service and make their day happier.
I hope that my heart for coffee and people together with my experience in the customer service industry will make me an excellent addition to your team.
I would love to meet you in person, at your convenience, to discuss the possibility of becoming a part of your business. I wish you the best of success. Thank you for your consideration.
are there any errors?
Please help me out.
Please accept this letter in application for a position within your company.
As you can see in the enclosed resume, I have great customer service skills with approximately 5 years experience in the customer service industries.
I have enthusiasm and passion for coffee. I have learned about coffee and a bit of latte art at a coffee school right before I came to Canada. I like to see people happy with my service and make their day happier.
I hope that my heart for coffee and people together with my experience in the customer service industry will make me an excellent addition to your team.
I would love to meet you in person, at your convenience, to discuss the possibility of becoming a part of your business. I wish you the best of success. Thank you for your consideration.
Top answer
No errors jump out at me, however I did concentrate more on the content. I don't wish to be critical but think you might re-word it i order to sell yourself more. Is this a cold call or an advert?
- No errors jump out at me, however I did concentrate more on the content.
- I don't wish to be critical but think you might re-word it i order to sell yourself more.
- Is this a cold call or an advert?
- Adverts have keywords on them which you need to use.
- I don't like the 'As you can see in the enclosed resume' but the rest of that paragraph is good, with the exception of 'a bit of latte art' - sell it better!
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No errors jump out at me, however I did concentrate more on the content. I don't wish to be critical but think you might re-word it i order to sell yourself more. Is this a cold call or an advert? Adverts have keywords on them which you need to use. I don't like the 'As you can see in the enclosed resume' but the rest of that paragraph is good, with the exception of 'a bit of latte art' - sell
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