help me to correction bisiness letter

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dear Mrs. MutiaraniI am tenth grade student at SMAN 5 Palangka Raya. I live in Taruna Tingang Jaya sakti's dormitory. We have the problem with the Bathroom.i diassapointed about bathroom in boys dormitory. there are many bathroom, but just 1 room can be used by us. the problem which make so many bathroom can't be used because the floors are broken and the water can't flow out. It make us spend so many time to queue for take a bath.we need good bathrom for take a bath. the bathroom must good and the water can flow out. if the bathroom is good, we are not to queue for take  a bath.i hope with this letter, the problem can be finished thank for the attention the last i say, Thank you.sincerely,Gery Morales M.

Blue Jay · Accepted Answer

Help me to correct a business letter.

Dear Mrs. Mutiarani,

I am a tenth grade student at SMAN 5 Palangka Raya. I live in Taruna Tingang Jaya Sakti's dormitory. We ~~have the~~ are experiencing problems with the bathrooms ~~i diassapointed about bathroom~~ in the boys' dormitory. There are many bathrooms, but ~~just 1~~ only one ~~room~~ can be used ~~by us~~. The problem which makes so many bathrooms ~~can't be used because~~ unusable is that the floors are broken and the water can't flow out. (I am not clear what you mean here. Do you mean the floors are broken, and also there's a problem with the water? Is the problem that there is no water coming out of the taps (faucets), or is it that the water doesn't drain away?) It makes us spend ~~so many~~ considerable time to queuing up ~~for~~ to take a bath.
We need good bathrooms ~~for~~ to take our baths ~~the bathroom must good and the water can flow out~~ where the water flows (or drains) properly. If the bathrooms is were good, we ~~are~~ would not have to queue ~~for~~ to take a bath.
~~i hope with this letter, the problem can be finished thank for the attention the last i say, Thank you.~~
I hope these problems can be resolved soon. Thank you for your attention in this matter.

sincerely,

Gery Morales M.

Yohana Septhiya · Answer

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Yohana Septhiya · Answer

Excuse me,  can you tell me what verb you use this in a business letter?

Blue Jay · Answer

I'm afraid I don't understand your question. Could you explain it to me please?

Yohana Septhiya · Answer

i mean, can you explain to me, you check the business letter using any tenses?

Blue Jay · Answer

It is mainly written in the simple present tense.

Yohana Septhiya · Answer

thank you for your help, you are very helpful .<img class='emoticon' style='Width:19px;Height:19px;' data-delaysrc='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/97.gif' src='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/97.gif' alt='Emotion: clap'/>

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