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Adonis Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Help me revise this paragraph, Thank you.

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Can you help me revise this paragraph
Thank you for your help.

The rich want to distinguish themselves from the poor by these exotic products. In other words, commercial plays a crucial role in stimulating wealthy people to consume.The existence of commercial just attempt to encourage people to buy what they don’t truly need.
  

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Hello Adonis I'm not quite sure what you mean by 'commercial' here, and it's difficult to check the paragraph without knowing. Can you explain? MrP

— MrPedantic

  • Hello Adonis I'm not quite sure what you mean by 'commercial' here, and it's difficult to check the paragraph without knowing.
  • Can you explain?
  • MrP
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Hello Adonis

I'm not quite sure what you mean by 'commercial' here, and it's difficult to check the paragraph without knowing.

Can you explain?

MrP
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Hello MrPedantic

The commercial means the kind of advertisement on TV.
Thank you for your help.
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Hello Adonis

I would change it slightly:

'The rich want to distinguish themselves from the poor, and the consumption of exotic products is one way of doing so. Commercials play a crucial role in stimulating wealthy people to consume goods they don't really need.'

MrP
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