Help me proofread the motivation letter,pls,thanks!!!

hi guys, i'm from china. i gonna apply for admission of the Erasmus University Rotterdam. could you please help me proofread my motivation letter? thanks so much!!!

motivation letter

Dear Madam or Sir,

I am hereby applying for entrance for the International business administration program at the Erasmus University Rotterdam (EUR) in September 2009.In the following letter I will explain why I think that the EUR is the ideal university for me.

First of all I would like to start with information regarding my background. I was raised in a small town called kaifeng, situated in the middle part of China. When I was 10, my parents made me come into contact with english. Later, in the school, I realised that I was a quick learner and English rapidly became my favorite and best subject.



In the middle school, I started to get involved in school politics by being elected as president of student council. Although designing and managing activities such as debates, sports games and jumble sales take much of my time, it is still a pleasant, challenging and meaningful experience for me. During this time, I found that the ability of coorperation, organization and communication, which will play important roles in my future profession, has been improved.



Since my father transferred his job to Zhengzhou, the capital city of Henan province, I continued my middle school study in Zhengzhou. Although at the point of transfer I was a little homesick, I quickly overcame my feeling and was so used to the new environment.



After my enrolment into one of the best high schools in Henan province, knowledge related to business sparked my interest to know more and deeper about business world. I followed the news and media and listened to the opinions of economics about the wall street crisis. I was curious to know what went wrong in the financial system and the long, hard task of fixing it and how everybody could be unconsciously influenced.



As I am seriously considering specializing in business administration after keenly interested in acquiring more theoretical knowledge and practical skills in this field, I would like to be given the opportunity to learn a great deal from the staff at the EUR university. Its accreditations and rankings as well as being renowned as one of top business schools in Europe definitely draw my attention. I believe that the EUR university can provide me a world class programme, which can be a great start of my business career.



Moreover, I am fanscinated about the internationalization of Erasmus University Rotteerdam. I feel very excited when I meet new people and make new friends especially with those who have different backgrounds, cultures and habits from me. Since the Netherlands has been an international and open country, and international students are all welcome at the EUR, I believe there are lots of chances to get in touch with people I may not have opportunity to meet in my usual life. It will broad my horizon and help me to deal with cultural diversity, which could come in handy if I would like to work for international companies.



Last but not least, I am convinced that language skills will gain much credit for individuals. Multinational firms with business on a global scale are more inclined to hire people with bilingual or multilingual ability. Studying in the Netherlands will not only improve my English speaking, but also offer me a chance to learn Dutch, which can contribute a lot to foreigners to adapt to local culture.



To sum up, I have determination and positive motivators to reach higher levels of performance. Being a successful business administrator is the motivation of my study and part of my self-actualization. I hope that EUR can offer me the chance to help me make my dream come ture.



Thank you very much for considering my application. I am looking forward to your positive response. It would be a valuable opportunity to study at EUR university.



Yours faithfully,