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Hello everyone,
I tried to write an email to answer a university, and I want you to see it and help me with your corrections please.
Dear ****,
Thank you for your prompt response,
Please find attached my qualifications, I would like to know if you accept me to join your students, and if so would you tell me please which year I will be eligible to join, because I studied three years computing and I have background in many subjects such as : programming languages, mathematics...
Many thanks
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Dear ****, Thank you for your prompt response, Please find (Did they lose it? ) I have attached a document stating my qualifications (Normally we call this type of document a "CV") , (Do not join sentences with a comma. ) I would like to know if you would accept me to join your students, and if so, would you tell me please which year I will be eligible to join, because I studied three years computing for three years and I have background in many subjects such as : programming languages, mathematics...
- Dear ****, Thank you for your prompt response, Please find (Did they lose it?
- ) I have attached a document stating my qualifications (Normally we call this type of document a "CV") , (Do not join sentences with a comma.
- ) I would like to know if you would accept me to join your students, and if so, would you tell me please which year I will be eligible to join, because I studied three years computing for three years and I have background in many subjects such as : programming languages, mathematics...
- (Your sentences are long and garrulous.
- ) Many thanks
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Dear ****,
Thank you for your prompt response,
Please find (Did they lose it? )
I have attached a document stating my qualifications (Normally we call this type of document a "CV"), (Do not join sentences with a comma. That is incorrect punctuation.)
I would like to know if
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