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Pluralist Posted 17 years ago
Grammar

Help me please :(

I wonder whether or not my sentences are correct!
Here are my sentences:

Oh Lord!
You will not hear my prays more, as I have been swamped in the life marsh up to my eyes.
Yet never will I close my sanguine eyes against your mercy.

Thanx
  

Top answer

you will no longer hear my prayers - archaic, more poetic you will not hear my prayers any more- colloquial swamped in life (life does not have an article unless it is specified 'the life you lead') - the end of the first like makes no sense- do you mean 'swamped in the marsh of life up to my eyes' (where the marsh is a metaphor for life) the whole thing sounds rather odd, I have to say- did you write that yourself- where did you get it? is it translated? if so, from which language?

— Yellowwdaisy

  • you will no longer hear my prayers - archaic, more poetic you will not hear my prayers any more- colloquial swamped in life (life does not have an article unless it is specified 'the life you lead') - the end of the first like makes no sense- do you mean 'swamped in the marsh of life up to my eyes' (where the marsh is a metaphor for life) the whole thing sounds rather odd, I have to say- did you write that yourself- where did you get it?
  • is it translated?
  • if so, from which language?
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you will no longer hear my prayers - archaic, more poetic
you will not hear my prayers any more- colloquial
swamped in life (life does not have an article unless it is specified 'the life you lead')
- the end of the first like makes no sense- do you mean 'swamped in the marsh of life up to my eyes' (where the marsh is a metaphor for life)

the whole thing sounds rather odd, I
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Thanks a lot yellow daisy Emotion: smile
My language is persian, and I'm ,unfortunately, so weak in English
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